Just a avid reader
idk if its just me but in the first sentence you used the same phrase twice and it just sounds awkward. An example of a better alternative is: "Thank you" Theo mumbled (or expressed) to the cashier...
Tis but a scratch.
the cave have -> the cave gave
These flags make the story a bit too predictable at timed
The author wrote that the spatial perception only allows him to see a few centimeters around him in chapter 87.
I think the name is good, it's practical.
For example using description to show how a character is feeling (maybe facial expressions or body language) which lets the reader use their own imagination to draw conclusions rather than telling us James thoughts directly. I'm not a author nor an expert at writing stories so the author can ignore about whatever I'm saying or reflect on it. Its up to them in the end.
Feedback to author: I think you need to work on showing rather than telling the story bc to me some of it comes across as you informing us of what's happening rather than allowing us (the reader) to experience the world and characters your creating from your words if that makes any sense. Also I'm not trashing the story at all. I do enjoy it but would like to see you improve as a writer so that I can enjoy it more
Okay that makes sense. A nice coincidence that he got 2 free contracts then.
wait didn't he make a contract for maggy? what's stopping him from making another contract in this case?
Is it because they don't know you can create new skills? or is it because they're lazy? And if its because they're lazy, then they're sabotaging their own chances of surviving and being stupid.
Could someone explain what aether is and why is it important to the mc and other characters? I thought that torug wanted to avoid clashing with davis? Also great chapter author, It would be great if you could explain how torug appeared in the city next chapter.
Maggy is very perceptive for a 6yo, most kids are dumb as hell.
Every pet is chilling in some corner of hell.