It’s alright apart from the fact that he keeps thinking with his dick, when it comes to Jean it doesn’t make sense, the whole mutants arc doesn’t make sense.

In my head I had her as late 20s closer to 30s coz of her profession It made the chapter hard to read, it wasn’t so much her age, it was you state multiple times his age was 15 in this chapter, it felt predatory on her behalf,like she has no professionalism at all, I don’t know, this chapter didn’t sit well with me, I was uncomfortable reading it, Just my thoughts

He’s 15 right I’m not misreading this am I ?

So the woman is a pedo?

It’s a good fanfic as far as that goes, but it has the problem of following the generic Self insert Naruto fanfic archetype, get close to the hokage, get close to Naruto, shill for Konoha, a shameless protagonist, practically replicating cannon, Danzo still exists, the hokage is still useless, If you can manage to get by these hiccups it’s a good read, the one thing The author does really nicely is the pace , so it doesn’t feel as hamfisted as the other fanfics that follow this archetype

it started off well, but the protagonist got young master syndrome and ended up being like the Chinese novel protagonist, the romance became overbearing took away from the where it could have been just became another story about a kid who has a secret bloodline, who is actually a young master of some sort, of course his partner has to be suffering from some type of illness. it is interesting but all i can say is it lacks depth