Blaius

Good premise, but the stories been ruined by multiple people travelling to the past. There’s too much emotional drama coming at the reader from too many angles, it should’ve focused on the protagonist purely and the fallout of him travelling to the past and him changing the past and the rest of the cast not having that future knowledge.

You had a good story going, then had to push the generic justice crap. What’s the point you literally said your tired of the thousands of stories rehashing the same themes and then you do it yourself. These shitty Naruto type characters, the gain strength by protecting other people, how cliche is that. He spent millenniums hanging around with devils, chasing death doing horrid things to other pantheons in pursuit of his goals, and then you make him the ultimate good guy. Instead of justice he should be the 2 faced god of hypocrisy. It was much better before he turned into nayna.

You spent the first couple chapters showing how his life was miserable and how he used art as an escape from that hell then it became disappointing when he met Ai the way the story is going, he took a backseat to his success. It seems like when he died all his motivation left him. Instead of regaining that fire and aiming at achieving success he decided to become a supporting character for Ai.

Secret hero bs, nothing original. Just another version of the novels extra. They all follow the same plot reincarnate as a mob character and try to keep the plot the same. They have the same morals, all of the stories have the protagonist acting like a hero. It’s just stale at this point. It would’ve been more interesting reading about ren the evil guy with his problems than this Gary stue self insert.

Don’t fall in the trap takuma, the easiest way to get rid of someone is to bring them into the fold.

A downward descent into being a missing nin. The realisation that to be a shinobi is to lack moral considerations . That morals in that world are nothing, loyalty, comrades don't mean anything, That to be a konoha nin is to be a hypocrite. The stronger he gets the more alien he will be of his humanity, a shallow husk of what it means to be a human. He's finally acclimatised to the ninja world.

In a world where the mc has the abilities of bloodborne, he ends up relying on “teamwork” which means collecting cannon characters like Pokémon, ends up enemies of the phantom trope for no apparent reason, for some reason ends up in Bisuke graces and after that the story goes from ineteresting to cliche after cliche, how could have some much potential to pull from and run the story into utter trash, I mean you have bloodborne, the hunter who defeats the dream, germaine the beast, why is he so mediocre, his new abilities suck, you could’ve made people go mad from getting into contact with his blood, something to do with delirium, or bloodlust of a mad frenzy, instead you have a generic ass weapon that does little to nothing with damage and the only reason he wins against hisoca is plot. The worst thing is bring people with him to the dark continent, it could’ve been a solo explore thing, he becoming more monstrous after every trip, slowly losing his sanity, you make the dark continent seem tame, it’s no man’s land. That’s the end goal the ultimate place, but it’s like you’ve lowered the difficulty to make the mc survive, Finally, don’t make the character as some morally grey character who wants to fight beasts, when for some reason you shoehorn cannon characters in and make the mc help them like it doesn’t match with his original profile, like why would he help kurapica in the first place, why didn’t he scratch out bisuke contact, why help hisoca kill the phantom troupe, why be a spineless wimp when facing netero, this is germaine from bloodborne, from the city of blood, he fought against gods in yarnam, what is a man to him.

Don’t apologise, you don’t owe me anything, writings hard, and the fact I got through some chapters means you can write, it just the story didn’t align with my preference, continue doing you. Wish you best.

The worst thing about stories like these is the amount of asslicking the protagonist gets, everyone, even the hokage, his enemies, people who would kill him on sight , have good things to say about the protagonist and it feels off putting, once you’ve read one novel like this, they all sound the same, Typically always like this Either Civilian > friends with cannon character > prodigy > student of sanin > has to beat Kakashi or minato > burn village or hokage Or Uchiha > prodigy > hates/loves will of fire > friends with itachi or Shisui > mangekyo > then either burn village or be hokage Common between is the incessant romance of tsunade, the constant bootlicking of th eprotagonist, the protagonist ingratiating himself to a higher up or future prodigy, protagonist being smug even though it’s typically an adults mind beating on children. The very few fanfics that do it well, shy away from cannon characters and world build and expand on their own, this is’nt that. If your looking for slightly higher tier than typical Mtl novels read on, If not look elsewhere. The cliches ring true Translator-San If you do indeed read the reviews, remove the asslicking such as “ so handsome” and “he’s the kindest” and “ he’s so powerful” etc. and the story would be so much better

Nice try writing the story, You had an interesting premise ruined by the some the generic side character person, it would’ve been far more interesting reading about how nobita dealt with losing doraemon and growing up knowing his only friend was gone, you could’ve spun a mature side, made him bitter, dealing with his emotions, instead you have this copy pasted 3 wishes system character, who is used as a plot device to brush over the nobitas emotional struggles, you could’ve gone for depth but you went for shallowness and it really loses the readers investment into the story.