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While I generally agree, had Nephis not become his master, than Mordret would have back when he entered Sunny's soul realm, so I would think Nephis is a significant improvement compared that psychopath. Remember when he escaped? he chose to exterminate every person in his prison and almost killed them both, even though neither were his enemies at the time.
The best as far as I am concerned is What Was Needed by Serenechaos The Problem with Female OC/SI is that for the most part it is a wish fulfillment where they get with one of the main cast, either one of the four protagonist, Hisoka, Illumi, or one of the Phantom troupe. The problem with each is that out of the four main characters Gon and Kurapika are an automatic no-go unless you change Kurapika's past so much he no longer resembles his original character, Killua requires a subtle match that can flow with his character and not 'fix' him, and Leorio just does not appeal to the fangirl mentality. The problem with Hisoka, Illumi, and the Troupe is that they are all psychopaths of the highest order that see absolutely nothing wrong with torturing and murdering scores of innocent men, women, and children, which means that they completely alter them to fit their narrative, which is usually done horribly.
I get the terrible feeling that Cassie has been aware of the loops for a while, but was forced to keep quite about it; seeing as she became aware of the time loop on her own while on the Island. I feel like its actually her and not the Mad Prince that came up with the entire flow of events, using him to achieve the ideal outcome. Being aware of what is going to happen at every step but being unable to speak of it because it would change the flow of events. In fact, it believe that the chest full of journals is actual a journal for each loop that she recorded during the two years she spent without anyone else, using that time and the knowledge of actions and consequences to map out her actions.
MTL is not a legitimate translation, it is a horrific amalgamation of letters and words that rarely even resembles the original story that is so horrifically written that most would rather give up on what is a wonder story then suffer a literary-stroke. People that actually invest time in translating should be praised for their hard work and while not all of them are skilled enough to complete do justice to the stories they translate, their effort should be acknowledge compared to copy the original and pasting an AI generated translation
Trying not to be an ass about this but here goes, I have read up to chapter 10 and unfortunately the story really is being hashed out properly. What is mean is that we see what is essentially an urchin suddenly capable of taking on fully grown and capable adults without previous training, or at least it seems that way. You run through the entire Heaven's arena in 3 sentences, give no indication to the nature of his Nen, any Hatsu he may have developed or any detail outside of he is awesome. I read somewhere in the reviews that it was generated by AI and it really feels that way, ChatGPT is capable of creating stories given the proper input but unless there is a long process of refinement its very condensed and does not take into account the natural limitations of Nen when describing characters and their powers, I know I checked. If you are serious about this story, you need to rewrite everything from the base up and take into account the world you are transmigrating into, the intricacies of Nen and martial arts, and the logical flow of events. The Amazing corporation was good idea, but the process by which you created it and the MC partner are woefully incompletely and do not flow well if look at in any logical fashion. A for effort, but D for execution. Sorry but after decades of reading HxH fanfiction this is only slightly better then basic wish fulfillment story without properly structure or flow
Overall the story is very interesting. More importantly, its not a idiotic harem or a psychotic snuff fantasy. While the MC is somewhat OP, he is still restrained by the limitations of Nen, which he works around using proper limitations. While there is a system concept, it is far less overpowered then most Isekai stories. As such, you are unlike to see the MC equal some of the top tier Nen user in the series; though his ingenuity does exploit the fact that stronger Nen user can be taken down by weaker Nen users through opportunity, condition, and deception. The only issue I have is that as a Chinese translation, the translator leaves a lot of the grammatical story telling structure, such as the use of Brother, Sister, Aunt, and other when referring to the people in the story. For example, when an older character refers to the MC, they usually use little brother MC or when referring to Biscuit, instead of calling her Bisky-chan, as they do in the anime/manga, she wishes to be referred to as Sister Biscuit. While it does not make the translation bad, it can be distracting.
Wonder what Weave's Legacy will do to the Domain. If it does not interact with it, that means that Sunny will gain a shadow-based domain from his connection to the Shadow God, but if it does interact with it, will it give him a Domain of Fate or consume it for some kind of boost
While the story is interesting and the premise is good, it has very little editing which makes it difficult to read. Additionally, while the author does take feedback, which is easy to notice after reading 200+ chapters, the older chapter are a mess and require significant rewrite. Essentially, while there is definitely improvement in the writing style, there are very few people that will be able to reach that point before giving up, which is the main reason this story will never see the top lists. For example, the other switches between story-lines between several chapters and you lose focus on their main character, while being forced to focus on characters the readers just aren't able to connect with because they disappear within a few chapter and have very little connection to the main story. While it was fixed, it still remains as a part of the story and is very difficult to gloss over. The only advise I can give to the author a complete rewrite for the first 200 chapters with serious editing and removal of filler chapters.
Read up to chapter 60 So lets be real, is it a bad story? No. Is it a good story? also no. The biggest issue is that the writer appears to believe himself to be the center of all existence, but to a very annoying degree. First the main cast, the MC appears to be their idol and someone there completely trust after seeing him kill his enemy in the Tower and speaking to him for ten minutes, to the point that Kurapika, the most intelligent and paranoid member of the group, just tell him the nature of his ability; without using the Dowsing chain to verify his connection to the Spiders. The Spiders seems to be wear of him which completely contradicts their very nature. Not really worth the effort unless you are into self-aggrandizing MCs and wish fulfillment
"HARDLY SPELLING MISTAKES" are you serious? I thought I was having a stroke trying to read it. I am still trying but come on, it like he directly used MTL and didn't even edit afterwards. unless you are a professional some grammatical error are expected but this reads like someone using google translate copy/paste and not invest any effort to make it readable