dukroger

Man...I would have just wiped his mind and left him somewhere else...with MC's powers that would have been easy...I'm not against him killing...but killing people who don't deserve it and don't even want to poses a risk to him and his interests is unnecessary.

Author friend, can I make a recommendation? If the MC receives some divine blood, Kryptonian and some being like elves or fairies, angels, can you make him evolve into a different vampire? like without having the bloodlust and the dark side constantly pushing him, like to create a balance, like Yin and Yang.

Does she know the MC's identity?

Truly a parallel world, the part that was supposed to be inspired by China became Japan....the culture, army, economy and sciences are very different, it's like exchanging a world inspired by Greece for an Egyptian world... Well anyway form is an alternative world...I just hope this works.

Look at the movie ,dragon heart, the dragons in the movie may not be as powerful as those in the world of warcraft and fairy tail, but they have intelligence equal to or greater than humans, the body of a dragon and magic, even an enchantment system. Compared to this, the dragons in this world should be called Draks, a sub-race of dragons, normally bioeds with wings on their upper limbs and an intelligence compatible with that of dolphins or other animals like that.

This was a bit forced...the mc should have received some model of characters like Jack, son of Lucifer in supernatural, with the body that was able to adapt to the power of God, something like simple changes would be easy, no It didn't even need to receive all the power, just the potential and characteristics would be fantastic.

I would have melted a column with the heat rays and then cooled it with the breath, maybe lifted an entire island, they need a show of strength, Clarke is giving respect, but he's not getting it back, I'll give you an example, imagine that the president of the United States enters a clandestine country without accident, even when discovered, no one will arrest or treat him badly, at most arrange accommodation and things like that, and not only because he is the representative of a country, but mainly because of his military power and the economic sector it represents. That's what you need in the story.

Congratulations on the story, the relationship development part is good, the problem with Harem is that the more women, the less we see the relationship between them or even have the chance to deepen our understanding of these women, so far you've managed to do this well, the MC just needs to learn to separate his destiny as a greater future Maou from that of Harem, he loses loyal subjects and some with great potential because of this.

The mc instead of a stronger Maou system, it should be from the Harem, the objective of the chess pieces is to allow talents to join the devil race, and increase their number since not as many were born as humans or replace the that were lost in wars, instead of thinking about these things this mc only thinks about making a Harem.... He is a disgrace to the title of Maou!

He could have saved the guy with the weapons, he was a faithful companion with good skills, what's worse is that it would have cost him almost nothing... mc who thinks more with his head below than with his head is complicated....