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I really like the premise you're working with here, but you really need to get out of the habit of falling back on lazy writing. 'That' losses any effectiveness if you keep using it. If it's so secretive that it can't be named, you certainly aren't having a lengthy discussion in which you continuously reference that unnamed 'that'. couple chapters late, but oh well

Are the chapters still mostly copy & paste filler describing loot & abilities, or did the author get back to writing a story?...serious question, need something new to read

how far is not far? if the battle is so easy for elorin why hasn't he done anything to stop this interrogation in the middle of the battlefield? is this one of those terrible web-novel tropes of let a few known characters die so we can be shown how powerful elorin is?

only after being heavily edited down, with chapters like these given the boot or chopped up and made into a paragraph.

well, i did say or so. i kid. you're right i shouldn't have used why, "the in's & out's of his self-created ranking system." there that's better, no? 1. he has no idea what his ability is right now & if remember correctly it is not fully awakened yet. it's just a feeling he has right now. 2. he doesn't have all the input values yet to even attempt to start ranking, as we find out here, & yet he rigidly sticks to these rankings when creating a plan of attack.

lol, is it really a spoiler though? Well i guess I got another spoiler for you...salt is a preservative. So, congratulations you are now less ignorant than before you meet me! You're welcome

no shit

Can we get bullet points on the loot? This is becoming ridiculous. Loot descriptions are taking up way too much of each chapter now.

Didn't need you to explain why he created his ranking system, and using the meter lends no credence to your argument. Any measurement should be able to be validated by outside sources, the mc's cannot be & on several occasions is invalidated in the next couple of lines. It is also completely abandoned within 50 or so chapters.

Well, to be honest I read 2 whole chapters of this shitshow. This paragraph was just the first major clue as to what would follow. Imagine buying a luxury vehicle and then spending money to make it bomb proof, but then getting killed buy some idiot with a .22 cause you didn't say you also wanted it bulletproof. Think that shit would actually happen? If you do your and idiot, so mentioning both is pointless A road maintained for his use, or something to this effect, implies this is a private road for his personal use. This is stupid and cities will not maintain this for you. Everything is about word count for this asshat, why else would he write out the MC's full name every fucking time? Have we been introduced to any other character named Compass? Anywho, continue reading stuff. I'm sure those squiggly lines will start to make sense to you one day.