Going to need to be edited before reading. It's just bad. Couldn't finish the first chapter. Gave the 1 star for grammer and 3s for everything else since I'm trying to be somewhat fair. Thanks for the attempt. It can't be easy to write, especially if it's not your native language.

thanks coach... glad your back

See this! I just gifted the story: Grimoire

same thing with bass and base...

Thanks for the chapter. have a typo. tense change at the end. with the sentence "you ask first." unless your going for some stylized writing... probably should be asked. have a great day!

Thanks for the Chappy you have change in tense with the word impregnated. should be impregnating or something in future instead of past tense

was happy to have another chappy... then its a cliff... thanks

your alive!!! thanks

when is a battle between twins ever just a game for fun? this should be good

anyone else feel like their lack of batting strategy is going to haunt them?

cutting it close to the wire again.... will she make it?

should do today's chappy now... so your a day ahead.... we won't complain if its early

I was sad it wasn't there when I woke up lol... thanks for posting [img=recommend]

she missed the next chappy

2 cliffhangers in a row... killing me smalls

going to get a chapter a day for this month

thanks for the update. you have a typo when the coach is talking about getting one hit a game... i think he just says on. I may have read it wrong.

priceless

See this! I just gifted the story: Ring