SonataL
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The obscure we see eventually. The completely obvious, it seems, takes longer. ~Edward R. Murrow
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SonataL3yrCommentedKinda OP since it would also affect those significantly stronger than him by the 50% decrease in abilities.
Creates a circle with 20m radius of pure, perfect darkness. Enemies are blinded, weakened, and will experience constant damage within this radius. Power escalates with proximity to caster.- SonataL3yrCommented
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My life before I died, could be called an uneventful one, I had no dreams and aspirations, of course apart from being transmigrated to another world, but like that's ever gonna happen, right... I had few friends and the ones I did, I rarely spent time with. My parents wanted me to study hard, get rich and finally get married. Of course, I agreed with them... in the beginning. But I started getting addicted to web novels, light novels and a bunch of other stuff. I would spend hours every day reading away locked away in my room. Neglecting spending time with my family and studying for school. - SonataL3yrCommented
You're switching between present and past tense. You said "continued" which is past and then say "tries", which is present.
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No. Same reason as the other 2, it seems a bit forced.
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