MrCoconut
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MrCoconut2mthCommentedIt has evolved into golden eyed Umbreon
The Hell Civet, entirely dark with golden pupils, sported long pointy ears, exuding a certain cuteness. What stood out most was the crescent-colored pattern covering its body, mysterious and dazzling. The tail and ears bore matching crescent patterns, giving an overall mystique, though slightly cold.- MrCoconut2mthCommented
F, the cat girl ship has fallen. Sad day indeed.
Zhu Zhuqing's face appeared a little pale and her expression seemed somewhat dazed. At the last moment, she suddenly thought of herself and her family. It felt as if a heavy weight was pressing down on her, her heart throbbed in pain, but ultimately, she couldn't quite make the decision as the flower fell. - MrCoconut2mthCommentedThe one on the right had a black body with golden circular patterns.
- MrCoconut2mthCommentedThe one on the left was entirely purple, with eyes and body and a red gem embedded in its forehead.
- MrCoconut3mthReplied to Alice_chris_Noah
Seems like he's going for the Qian Renxue route. Sad that he didn't go for the cat girl Zhu Zhuqing, but it is what it is
As they walked, Wang Feng shook his head. Zhu Zhuqing and Dai Mubai had been together since childhood, a serious couple. No one had the right to interfere in their matters. - MrCoconut3mthCommentedin front of him, which seemed to be half apple half pen, before sitting down.
- MrCoconut3mthCommented
meddling, instead of medaling
Alright, it is time to stop focusing on those stupid medaling kids. I have spent far too long trailing behind them, hoping that they would take care of all the shit and prevent me from stepping in shit. But clearly, that was a pipe dream. Things went off course the moment I boarded that train and talked to a student, hell, probably since I showed up in this world. It was ludicrous to think that things could have kept chugging on unchanged, but I hoped... - MrCoconut4mthCommented
*bed
Percy looked at Grover and then shook his head again, "I-I'm fine G-man. I think I must have just hit my head on your bead one to many times." - MrCoconut4mthPosted
Decent idea, but the author has frequent grammar and pacing issues. Not to mention, entire paragraphs get shuffled or erased, like somebody saying fighting words, next sentence someone was beaten and there was a whole fight just deleted. Various things are also stated about the status, but you don't see when the MC obtained them, making you wonder if that was also deleted.
This book has been deleted. - MrCoconut4mthCommented
I'm pretty sure he's from Tuatha Dé Danann, from the Irish pantheon.
Making my way to there I stumbled upon one of my favorite gods from the anime, blue haired and quite nice looking Miach. I never know from with mythology is he exactly but his kindness can't compare to almost any other god. Currently he was with his follower Naaza, a chienthrope lady with long brown hair, purple eyes and features like those of a dog. - MrCoconut4mthCommentedBut in an instant charging Ruffians turned into blood baths, their bodies exploded as the strong and large figure of a man dropped on their heads. Just like that, they all died, looking on the ground a man grunted at his dirty shoes.
- MrCoconut4mthPosted
This is a great story, the only thing that I have against it is that this is part one of the story. It is called "The Games We Play" on spacebattles for anyone who wants to read it at the source. The author Ryugii never wrote the sequel, "The Lies We Tell" apart from the initial preview. While I could say that there's a chance somebody could make their own sequel, the chances of it having the same tone are low to none.
- MrCoconut4mthCommented
It's a good idea to credit the original author on the summary page, helps provide visibility for the original author.
DISCLAIMER: This story is NOT MINE IN ANY WAY. That honor has gone to the beautiful bastard Ryugii. This has been pulled from his Spacebattle publishment. Anyway on with the show...errr read. - MrCoconut4mthReplied to Angelo_Indiano
It's a CN fanfic, they butcher a lot and the TL doesn't care to edit it.
It seems fitting to say that Tione is truly an Amazoness, especially with her title as the "Fury Serpent." Once she becomes enraged, no one can hold her back. - MrCoconut4mthCommented
And just like that, the DC spinoff was snapped out of existence
Starting Vacation - MrCoconut4mthCommented
Closet Murder Hobo. Soon he'll feel the urge to faceslap Arrogant Young Masters and steal Jade Beauties.
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Some people might like this kinda story, but it's just too much .The author gave protag so much power that the story lost its meaning. He already has a fiance, already created new treatments/products and has masters in several fields, has an Order of Merlin and was born to a wealthy pure blood family. He even has cheats with his bloodline magic, strength of a senior auror at eleven years old, and is messing with soul magic with Dumbledore not being an ass about it. The only fics with this level of OP-ness are crack fics where the MC is an unhinged psycho, is maneuvering as an underdog to take over, or is looking for a partner(s) in crime (romantic partner(s)).The worst part is that the story doesn't even have 10 chapters. The pacing is messed up and he got way too strong too fast. Even the romance has them acting like a married couple at age 11, with the maturity you would expect someone in their 20s, maybe late teens at earliest to have. And that's not considering the issues with grammar, run-on sentences, and walls of text. Tl;Dr: Pacing for the story is way off and the MC got too OP. Romance developed way too fast and nobody really has a personality. The author would benefit from storyboarding and making a rough outline for the story pacing, but that's up to them.
- MrCoconut5mthCommented
This is a wall of words, which could benefit from another round of editing (or use Grammarly). There are too many spaces between punctuation, and the words run on.
" Albus something is not possible don't ask for the impossible " and to that my dad said " it might be possible " and then I continued " it is possible to a certain extent but to heal a soul i would need to be a master soul magic like I did with healing and mind arts i would need to extensively learn and research and soul magic and that could take a lot of time and can be very dangerous cause playing with a soul is no laughing matter as I could be challenging to very nature of this world " everybody understood the seriousness of this matter but Dumbledore understood the true implications of my words ' and now I will be able to learn about soul magic without any implications as they will not see anything wrong with it and getting anything related to soul magic is almost impossible the little bit I have learned is from the potrait of the first lady Eldervale so from Dumbledore I might be able to get something if not Hogwarts is there ' . - MrCoconut5mthCommented
He knows he's in the world of Harry Potter, but he doesn't know what McGonagall looks like? Stern lady with brown/gray hair in a bun, wearing a wizarding hat and (usually) green robes?
If the women in front of him, know his name, which even he didn't know until a few days ago.