Review Detail of MrCoconut in Harry Potter: An Exception Side Character

Some people might like this kinda story, but it's just too much .The author gave protag so much power that the story lost its meaning. He already has a fiance, already created new treatments/products and has masters in several fields, has an Order of Merlin and was born to a wealthy pure blood family. He even has cheats with his bloodline magic, strength of a senior auror at eleven years old, and is messing with soul magic with Dumbledore not being an ass about it. The only fics with this level of OP-ness are crack fics where the MC is an unhinged psycho, is maneuvering as an underdog to take over, or is looking for a partner(s) in crime (romantic partner(s)).The worst part is that the story doesn't even have 10 chapters. The pacing is messed up and he got way too strong too fast. Even the romance has them acting like a married couple at age 11, with the maturity you would expect someone in their 20s, maybe late teens at earliest to have. And that's not considering the issues with grammar, run-on sentences, and walls of text. Tl;Dr: Pacing for the story is way off and the MC got too OP. Romance developed way too fast and nobody really has a personality. The author would benefit from storyboarding and making a rough outline for the story pacing, but that's up to them.