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I for some reason I feel sorry for this Martial arts sect The only in this problem because the ancestors arrogant And wanted to divide lines between nobility and common And who should learn martial arts? Now the descendants are Paying the price.
Did you change the name of what you normally call the energy? In the series as you continue writing You started calling it yaun hai Or is that the upgrade version of what it's called in the novel?
The main character cultivation makes no sense no more. Every time he upgrades, his cultivation makes him skip multiple Multiple realms every time. He's not even in. Origin fluid realm And no, he's basically E skips 4 levels in power while he's only in origin transforming realm. I understand that's how novels are sometimes, but it's getting exaggerated. He levels up twice and only goes peak Origin transforming realm Because the more you read it, he's a person who doesn't like to bring too much attention to himself. But he's Cultivation Tricks make him skip so Many realms It brings attention to him.
Every time they do math in this novel it kill Laughing In confusion The numbers make no sense. He has 200,000 points. But he spends over that and still has
Yeah, as I said, you have great grammar The writing is perfect. I'm just disappointed in the characters Sulking For 13 years Because you didn't have powers And his Dirty Pride Because he didn't get into the college. He Stayed in the city Where he doesn't have no money and he's Starving To death Instead of going home Where his parents are worried about him. He never gives a call home. Finally, when he got his powers, he goes home.And he finds that his mother is missing because he couldn't just call. The character seems to only think about himself. There's nothing wrong with that, but It takes me out of the story when I Character Has no power. His personality changes from what the original was why. When you have power, it makes what already in you Bloom According to what type of personality you have? But to see you.Sulking Because you don't have abilitias 13 years. This was a grown man once who's living his life again. That is just weird. Who had so much confidence at the starting How could someone personality change back-and-forth Like this, that sounds like Spoil a kid. If you just ask me. He was a soldier that came from a world that was Having an Apocalypse. He should have had a stronger will Power done, he had in the First 13 chapters. Because it seems his will power wasn't there. Until he got the system. That's why I hate when people give people overpowered systems in novels. It takes away from the personal will power. It seems like A lot of people like writing novels And the system always tells them what to do. Your system supposed to be a supportive item, not control you. From the moment your system tells you what missions to go and do. It seems like entity controls you like a puppet. I'm just saying. Because I'm a person who likes.Novels with systems, but they should have a limit.
The only thing I could say positive about this Novel is It is the grandma Aside from that, I hate this Main character He was so headstrong confident in the first chapter. Then he died. He went to a new world but because he couldn't use the power they had He wallowed in his Self-pity 13 years. He was a soldier he never trained his body. After he was reborn. He got beaten up, but instead of he going home because of pride He stays in the city and almost dies And because he's the main character he gets A system that helps him at the last moment. I won't lie just reading the first Couple of Chapter P***** me off. Because he became lazy, it's like his whole Character to changed. And as he get the system, he's supposed to go back to who he was before. If so, that means that's not his personality that means That's just a facade, he puts on.
But watch it from the point of view from the.Main character He's in the body of a little kid. He has a Mother that delusional and she a Drug addict And she's calling him a girl when she knows he's a boy. What that personality shows already is that she Won't listen to anybody who tells her anything else. So you think if this little boy told his mother she was wrong. And says I am a boy. She might not flip out on him. The way the person writes this in the story. They made it Look like it wasn't too crazy. But think about it, someone's that Delusional and mixed in with drugs that could have been deadly. If this person is confronted, you don't know what reaction you would get. That's all I'm saying.
This is the most weirdest comment I have ever read. How does a kid change a mentally disturbed woman? If he tried, he might end up putting himself in serious danger. This is the type of stupidity that gets people killed. Think before you speak.
I'm confused in this chapter. Wasn't she his sister But now in this Chapter you said his sister-in-law.
Why does the movement Technique Off the fusion says 2 levels. But then reads three levels
The person who writes this novel doesn't know how to do simple math. All the points are up to 47.435 How it's always less. Am I bugging?
My bad, I was wrong about the mistake.t
The Math In this chapter makes no sense. How do you add 4000 6000 5000 And get 11000 it's supposed to be 15,000
I'm confused what's number 4.