Gaara

you are good I understand I do like the story so thank you for the hard work!

so are they back to the apartment and not his 2.1 million dollar house?

they did the story has a lot of things that changes back to original contradicting the changes and story...

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I like how you have the characters so far. They have their own feelings and thoughts. You did a good job with the characters and everything else there is no need to change any of that. I just felt you went from the main character being Oscar who got reincarnated to a whole new character too fast. We didn't even get to enjoy or know anything about Oscar before he was gone. If your plan was to do that originally then maybe also have some chapters following Ethan as well. I did see you had Oscar come back at the end of 18 so hoping the next chapter explains what happened?? It was kinda confusing. Thanks for responding.

The story starts great and is about being reincarnated as a dungeon core but that changes fast and is no longer about the dungeon. The story feels great and could be an amazing story but you started a great story and changed way too quickly. There was no build-up of the world or even about any characters and by chapter 10 it's no longer about the reincarnated dungeon core.

I like the chapters long!

did you not see or read where he said he pushed himself to hard and his core and body are not in sync so he is more easily to snap and fall into rage due to his body and mind fighting his core

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