The story is good. That’s all it is tho. It has its negatives and positives like anything else but the quality of this doesn’t make you have that itch where you want to read more and more. His wishes are explained in ch. 10 for those people that might be confused why he isn’t totally Op. still though the author has his own theories of things and integrates them into the story which may rub some people the wrong way.. for example kust the way his infinity works or how he’s basically not letting ‘gojo‘ acutally utilize his godly chakra control. Some other things don’t make sense either like him and itachi learning seals from kushina to them in a matter of a few paragraphs being able to use flying thunder god. There should be a normal progression of skills, you can’t jump from explaining how kushina can make huge storage seals to them both just having flying thunder god. There are so many sealing jutsu that could be incorporated into their fighting style and since they’ve learnt it they should also use them no? This story would be pretty good for someone who has never watched naruto because even the most basic things are overexplained so the story often times feels lifeless, adding to that is that it seems the author is not a native English speaker so some things sometimes just come out wrong I feel like. Positive things are that the author has a plan in mind for the story and acutally gives explanations to things others would just overlook. I also like that itachi is being brought up as a rival for mc even though it does feel like the author has a hard on for itachi making him even more talented than he originally was… all in all pretty good but not comparable to some of the top tier stories on webnovel
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LIKEAlso mc got Raikages lighting cloak for a reason that isn’t explained?! It’s common knowledge that it couldn’t be copied by the sharingan so why would fugaku have it and gift it to mc?
I thought the sharingan could copy all jutsu but Kekkei Genkai, I will admit I overlooked explaining many things in the story. I will try and go back and add the explanation, for one Fugaku gave him that jutsu as he copied it with his sharingan, and MC has affinity for lightning release and had asked for it Also, Itachi and Mc had years to train the lightning thunder god, it didn’t happen over night. Minato gave it to MC because MC used a genjutsu on his subconscious, nothing too big but enough to make Minato think about doing it. Add Minato was friends with the family, he in end gave the jutsu after making a deal with Fugaku I have problems as I jump information I don’t see as important. I didn’t see all that as important, plus I’m scared of falling a whole chapter of me explaining stuff. I did it before and I would like to avoid doing such things
Ole_Tessmann:Also mc got Raikages lighting cloak for a reason that isn’t explained?! It’s common knowledge that it couldn’t be copied by the sharingan so why would fugaku have it and gift it to mc?
I see where you’re coming from but there’s actually a few jutsu that can’t be copied by the sharingan. The raikage’s lighting cloak and black lighting, onoki’s kekkei tota(no bloodline release just a mix of 3 chakra natures) his weightless and added weight jutsu, the 2nd tsuchikages invisibility and his splitting in two jutsu. There may be more I forgot but those jutsu can’t be copied with sharingan (correct me if I’m wrong please lol)
itachi1010:I thought the sharingan could copy all jutsu but Kekkei Genkai, I will admit I overlooked explaining many things in the story. I will try and go back and add the explanation, for one Fugaku gave him that jutsu as he copied it with his sharingan, and MC has affinity for lightning release and had asked for it Also, Itachi and Mc had years to train the lightning thunder god, it didn’t happen over night. Minato gave it to MC because MC used a genjutsu on his subconscious, nothing too big but enough to make Minato think about doing it. Add Minato was friends with the family, he in end gave the jutsu after making a deal with Fugaku I have problems as I jump information I don’t see as important. I didn’t see all that as important, plus I’m scared of falling a whole chapter of me explaining stuff. I did it before and I would like to avoid doing such things
I think you don’t really need to list the information necessarily, but could actually just show his actions and maybe the dialogue between them. I mean kushina and minato are supposedly close to the family but there have been like 3 or 4 interactions in total (from where I last read). Glazing over unimportant stuff is normal but I think you skipped a few steps too many. It’s all good tho I see you’re actively trying to improve your writing and story which is always nice to see! Keep it up
itachi1010:I thought the sharingan could copy all jutsu but Kekkei Genkai, I will admit I overlooked explaining many things in the story. I will try and go back and add the explanation, for one Fugaku gave him that jutsu as he copied it with his sharingan, and MC has affinity for lightning release and had asked for it Also, Itachi and Mc had years to train the lightning thunder god, it didn’t happen over night. Minato gave it to MC because MC used a genjutsu on his subconscious, nothing too big but enough to make Minato think about doing it. Add Minato was friends with the family, he in end gave the jutsu after making a deal with Fugaku I have problems as I jump information I don’t see as important. I didn’t see all that as important, plus I’m scared of falling a whole chapter of me explaining stuff. I did it before and I would like to avoid doing such things
