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2024-08-16 03:16

Is there room for improvement? Yes, but I'm loving the story so far. [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

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The story is good. That’s all it is tho. It has its negatives and positives like anything else but the quality of this doesn’t make you have that itch where you want to read more and more. His wishes are explained in ch. 10 for those people that might be confused why he isn’t totally Op. still though the author has his own theories of things and integrates them into the story which may rub some people the wrong way.. for example kust the way his infinity works or how he’s basically not letting ‘gojo‘ acutally utilize his godly chakra control. Some other things don’t make sense either like him and itachi learning seals from kushina to them in a matter of a few paragraphs being able to use flying thunder god. There should be a normal progression of skills, you can’t jump from explaining how kushina can make huge storage seals to them both just having flying thunder god. There are so many sealing jutsu that could be incorporated into their fighting style and since they’ve learnt it they should also use them no? This story would be pretty good for someone who has never watched naruto because even the most basic things are overexplained so the story often times feels lifeless, adding to that is that it seems the author is not a native English speaker so some things sometimes just come out wrong I feel like. Positive things are that the author has a plan in mind for the story and acutally gives explanations to things others would just overlook. I also like that itachi is being brought up as a rival for mc even though it does feel like the author has a hard on for itachi making him even more talented than he originally was… all in all pretty good but not comparable to some of the top tier stories on webnovel

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