The plot is good, however, stop trying to be fancy with words and speak direct and proper English. Every sentence seems so fancy and it seems like author tries to be poetic but it fails because it comes out as bland. It’s fine to use figure of speech, fancy words, indirect words.. but when the writing is the same throughout, it just seems bland and boring. Infact I struggle to finish a chapter cuz it just sounds the same. Switch up the POV more often and stop with the poetry, it’s a novel not a poem. I admire the effort though. Good Job
Kas73_
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いいねyeah the first thing that came to my mind while reading this novel is the time i used chatgpt for my assignment 🤣
Scarface3699:probably ai