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Item: I dispose Corpses In Konoha
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harsh07作者6mthharsh07

I've corrected Chapters 1 to 11 today changed the name of Uziki Xiyan to Uzuki Yugao Please suggest what more improvement I can make I'll do that

I dispose Corpses In Konoha

harsh07

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Rizki_CaturiantoLv1Rizki_Caturianto

There's improvement for a few first chapter author san.. But there still many Chinese name (like Moonlight Hayate, should be Gekkou Hayate, Uzuki Yugao still wrong I think, etc)

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change name of the villages too, thunder kingdom sounds dumb. also dignified to serious. there's lots of little things that make the story sound Chinese, but for that you'd have to do complete revision on the chapters. Its up to you if you want to do that. I'd say do it but it's gonna take you more time to release a chapter if you do decide to edit it so that it doesn't have that weird Chinese way of talking

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harsh07作者harsh07

Uzuki Yugao is her real name in Naruto

Rizki_Caturianto:There's improvement for a few first chapter author san.. But there still many Chinese name (like Moonlight Hayate, should be Gekkou Hayate, Uzuki Yugao still wrong I think, etc)

5mth