Good story. I have hope that this will potentially be a good read. The only negative I see is terrible use of gender pronouns (him/her/he/she). It makes it VERY confusing to read to the point it interrupts the flow of the story.
Blackstarbor
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いいねI noted improvement in the last couple chapters. Thank you, I'm really looking forward to your work.
Blackstarbor:I will try to correct that, but as I say English is not my language. I write it in my language and translate it into English.
You could use grammerly or chat gbt, to correct your mistakes. I tried char gbt and its really good.
Blackstarbor:I will try to correct that, but as I say English is not my language. I write it in my language and translate it into English.