why is your MC so submissive ? is he an M. All I read so far was him being led by 14-15 year old girl, all he did on his own was to make a soap and nothing more, don't he have any kind of short term goal to a long one ?
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いいねI had here a lenghty comment on why the first chapter was utterly bad but I deleted it. After reading a bit further, I noticed this author doesn't even use "" and '' for speech and thoughts, nor does he try to make a story. This is just a rushed retelling of events and the MC is continuing to s*ck at almost everything he does. The author tries to describe a foolish teenager as realistically as possible, completely omitting the fact the MC would have been dead in his first few days in ASIOAF if he acted that way. It's just... sigh. Reading this is basically stacking one disappointment of expectations after another.
I really enjoyed you game of thrones story, i mean your mc was op as well but it was in a fun way, but this made be loses some of my chromosomes after reading 🤣
KasiCair:I had here a lenghty comment on why the first chapter was utterly bad but I deleted it. After reading a bit further, I noticed this author doesn't even use "" and '' for speech and thoughts, nor does he try to make a story. This is just a rushed retelling of events and the MC is continuing to s*ck at almost everything he does. The author tries to describe a foolish teenager as realistically as possible, completely omitting the fact the MC would have been dead in his first few days in ASIOAF if he acted that way. It's just... sigh. Reading this is basically stacking one disappointment of expectations after another.