Review Detail of Fantastic_Spirit in Unlimited Harem Works

Honestly I dont know where to help you here. Usually people forget to put capitals and periods but not you. About the dialogue, the longer you write the more you figure out how to write better. Its sort of an experience thing. Well anyway this is just encouragement. Even if I havent read the story just for the 1st chapter 5 Stars . I completely agree with those statements btw.