There are other methods to convince a person to do something outside of threatening death. Hell it is linked to his nervous system, it could make him feel the pain of stubbing his toe or stepping on a lego instead and would likely be just as effective if not more so.

A Masochist I would assume. Who wants to be threatened with death every other second?

suspicion not suspension. suspension is something on a vehicle.

I really enjoyed this story up until the chapters leading up to chapter 82. The protagonist lost their agency to really decide anything but vengeance. He has no point of being apart of the family he is apart of except for being the Naruto of Harry Potter. He has no inheritance from a long standing family, he has an angry beast in him who can take over his body without consent. Finally he has to change schools and move across continents to complete a fetch quest where the point of the change of schools is to complete the fetch quest and not include in abilities due to it using the same curriculum of Hogwarts. While I rated this story highly due to the rating system, I would not recommend this story. Next thing we will know is that the Pendragon's will have some overpowered traits that the protagonist should have inherited but didn't because power scaling.

Was good up to this point. At this point what is the point of being a Pendragon except for Drak the Kurama of this story who has the power to take over the protagonist's body (which he admitted when Dumbledore showed up after the fight with Quirrel.) and seemingly is getting his agency taken from him.

Genetics don't work like that. These are obviously dominant traits that commonly appear in the clan otherwise they wouldn't be known for these bloodline limits and would be seen as an anomaly similar to Hashirama's wood release. Also there is no portrayed dominant genetic trait from Minato outside of his blue eyes and blonde hair, making it more likely that he should have inherited these traits. Honestly, that Naruto didn't have any of these plus the lack of red hair should make people question if he really was Kushina's or of Uzumaki heritage outside of that we saw the events surrounding his birth. Its my opinion that Kishimoto made the Uzumaki severely overpowered then gave Naruto shadow clone (that he has gone to state he regrets) making him try to scale down Naruto's abilities which inevitably portrays Naruto more like a common ninja without any Clan heritage. This is compounded with that Naruto never learns anything from his Uzumaki side, all his jutsu that he uses consistently come from Minato.

Did she not have white hair that looked silver when she was introduced?

so a heightened intuition or Sherlock Holmes, gotcha. thanks for responding.

What do you mean by mental flexibility? Are they able to easily change their point of view due to new information or is it like solving puzzles?

Too many parenthesis. it reads like Vit is supposed to be divided by ten first then divided by minutes. the /min should be outside the parenthesis. just for clarification a ( or ) are both parenthesis. While i know you mean per minute like how we read speed but the way it is written in the equation is misleading because you could read it as ((5/10)/60) since there are 60 seconds in a minute and 60 minutes in an hour.

I do not think that is necessarily true. It is the idioms that are difficult to translate as they are unique but everyone knows of The Journey to the West, The Art of War, and there are plenty of well translated cultivation novels. I have no way to know if the works of art are translated faithfully but I can say that they brought unique perspectives that western cultures (in majority) did not have before. It comes down to actually understanding both languages. Idioms however usually cannot be translated one to one because they often use slang or references unique to their cultures understanding.

Why did you mention the no moral thing in the contract then? you gonna have him stealing women? necrophilia? zoophilia? pedo? exhibitionism? seems weird to add it into the contract but choose to more or less ignore the closest debauchery near the protagonist.

I dont agree. Samuel is getting a one time payment of a random power and a chance to live again kinda. I will get back to why i said kinda. Anyway he gets paid once while giving potentially a lifetime of entertainment. Which brings me back to the kinda. He isnt really giving a chance from the way this is written. He either obeys or is erased. He has to provide entertainment or else he loses his one time payment. Entertainment is opinionated thus he has no way to gauge what to do or how. Unless Samuel is an actor it isnt likely he will provide much entertainment. The contract almost encourages debauchery and protects him from the repercussions of such acts only while the show is ongoing. this is highly stacked against the reincarnator and is closer to forced slavery.

Character design and background don't really have a place in this due to it being a fanfiction. The story develops at a good pace and I don't know the update stability so I cant judge that. The translation though has a several issues. Names specifically don't get translated frequently. Also characters get confused with other characters frequently as well. For example in chapter 50 Sakura was being referred to as Uzuki and in previous chapters Sakura was being referred to as Tenten. At this point this review system needs a grading for how well edited.

If that summary is any indicator for the translation, I would have to say you are quite biased. I will still give it a try, can't judge a book by its cover and all but that summary made my brain feel like it's wires were crossed incorrectly.

This chapter should have been apart of the previous chapter.

Most definitely

They are either not a native English speaker or did not learn English grammar correctly. Either way has a lot of potential, I would suggest and editor and not use AI to fix it. If you do speak English and/or have an English speaking friend I would have your friend or family read it, they would spot the issues quickly. I wouldn't get too down on this though. Most famous authors need an editor too, sometimes to tell them to cut portions of the story because it artificially extends the story pointlessly.

The only real negative thing I have to say about this story is that we are 15 chapters in and there is no clear primary protagonist. If there isn't going to be one, I have to say I am not a fan of event driven stories as we aren't seeing a journey but a series of events.

I would have preferred you write the story you want to tell and not change a plot point because of others wants. If you were informed of a plot hole that was created by your story, I would say mend it. Rollo doesn't want to be top dog, too many decisions and probably too much burden so he was fine with Ragnar becoming top dog. Scarlet makes absolutely no sense in being enthroned. Her becoming Earl would be akin to grabbing some random white person and making them the Earl. If you wanted to do this, I would go along the lines of a historic route where Ragnar is Earl until they go to England and could have him establish the Danelaw and rule there instead.