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I just finished reading the first chapter of this book and I gotta say, it's pretty interesting. It really grabs your attention right from the start. The only thing I think could use some improvement is the descriptions, especially when it comes to the world around the two main characters. And maybe a bit more action would spice things up even more. But other than that, I think this book has some serious potential.

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This story has potential, but it could benefit from better paragraphing and dialogue. The writer should focus on showing rather than telling, as there is too much information in one chapter. However, overall it is an interesting story, especially for fans of fantasy books. Keep up the good work!

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So happy you like it, new chapter tomorrow

This intro is amazing, it's rich world filled with mystery and great story telling. Keep writing this beautiful story.

The first chapter is really wholesome, but the sentences could use more structure and flow. It's a sweet book, so keep updating it because it's definitely worth writing.

This made me chuckle

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This book has potential. However, it's lacking in creative writing and descriptions, especially when it comes to world-building. On the bright side, the characters are intriguing and I absolutely love the mystery surrounding the plot. I have no idea where this story is going and that's what keeps me hooked. One thing that needs improvement though is the dialogue. It can get confusing at times and it would be great if the author could separate it for each character

Thank you. I will correct the typos. Thanks

I'm really into this book, but I gotta say, I wish there was more description - especially when it comes to the characters and the world they're in. And the paragraphing is a bit wonky, but that might just be the Webnovel format. Despite that, this book is seriously amazing. I'm dying to see where the story goes next. Oh, and that scene where the character is lying in the snow, almost dead? Incredible. Loved it.

So, I gotta say, your first chapter is pretty darn good. But, and this is just my two cents, I think the world around the scene could use a bit more description. And the paragraphing? Yeah, it's a bit off. But don't get me wrong, it's still an amazing first chapter. Keep up the good work!

Thank you so much. I am glad you enjoyed it.

This book definitely has potential, but I can't help but feel like it's repeating itself in certain parts. It could use a lot of editing and the grammar is a bit off, but overall, it's a good book. I see a great story ahead, but it needs some work to get there. Don't get me wrong, I enjoyed reading it, but it could be so much better with some fine-tuning. Keep at it, author!

Feel it* so good so far

Awe, thank you sooo much