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Hi, as mentioned earlier, Xy was reminiscing an old memory of him and his eldest lost brother. "He" refers to his brother.
Really unique set of a fantasy story from my perspective, and it's something personal but i found it funny and cool how you put "The End" at the end of your chapters, gives the story a dramatic twist. I do suggest you to divide the sentences a bit more, i often saw some walls of text but it didn't bother me that much, well done on this one.
What a rollercoaster of emotions those chapters were, i really enjoyed the last chapter, the author did a great job pulling the emotions of the reader, and twisting it all over. However i did notice some wording mistakes, and some paragraphs were like a wall of text which did displease me, but besides that, this is a solid story.
I surely took my time with my review, but my this writing quality is just really good. And i am SO attached to the MC i don't know why! The overall plot is very well done from the get go already, alot of cute moments which i really like. This is a genre not everyone likes, but give it a chance and you will be surprised just like i was.
This book is absolutely amazing, you did so well with the writing, the beginning was also so compelling. I personally could relate to the MC Raine so much, reading the first chapter felt so peaceful for SOME reason, i just feel very comfortable reading this. And i'm really glad you got the motivation to continue it, please don't drop it again!
A really interesting story to follow through. I'm saddened that most chapters are fairly short, it does leave me hungry for more though. But we want to see more! You've done an amazing job on the foreshadowing in the first few chapters, i honestly really enjoyed reading this. Just try to write more for each chapter,
You can definitely see that this book is written by a seasoned author, i can't think of better writing that this, especially for a story like this. I really loved reading the first few chapters, and jesus, the first one was action packed already, i really love the duality of emotions the reader feels while reading it, splendid work!