Rayyer

the story is like other iski slop the dialogue is uninteresting. the world is generic as its like every other " I come from the realy world their is a game I know everything" making the story development as u can call it a check list on how the mc get a Heram and become over powered. the characters are both one note and badly written the mc is publicly know to be one of the worst human beings possible but has friend.the combat its well made. world poorly developed e.g mc blessing amun Ra u do know that is and African God African gods behavior comply difficulty then other culture including and thing relayed to them there treat like any generic God like Zeus and u know God in a world wich is mainly dominant but a church like organization

this clearly just downgrade to ORV the writing in this storyis very jarring dialogue of the characters are so poring and devoid of substance there be paragraphs of just constent yapping that could of been done in like 3-5 sentences but is done in like 10 fill space

the world, the character and the development of the story is pretty generic predictability so as the sties just dives throw events that should have had no only more build up to but also more development has this makes everything shallow and rushed as if the story is just trying to meet check boxes character including the mc are also boring and unremarkable

this story has a yapping problem they Conaway keep dragging events for lon hen I needs to overstating there welcome the writer paywal the story when we barley introduced to the world for e.g we don't know the wat the power system is and how u works, there little character identify of the mc

I can see that there potential bu the author just rushes throw thing Makin It impossible to get attached to character only at a surface leave. dialogue is boring and uninteresting. the author doesn't know how to create natural flowin conflict and events as they just forced into the story etc the masters identify and the hes end and back story , the isikai shi way is I there, there's alot of tell no showing in this story

this just like every other brain rot content same generic mc,plot,character etc to fit all the self insert wish fulfillment fantasy here

this story is pretty generic moden fantasy how the story develops is so rushed that there is no room for things to breath and every chp is an info dump and become of this the character are barley develop and fi in to a troupe rather then flushed out character especially the mc te author focus on trying to justify the edgy nature of the mc this ruins the story as we the reader bearly spend time to get attached to him or other so and reaction the story makes is surface level and not deep. and on another not the edgyness of the mc makes him and interactions with him boring and predictable further destroy and natural progress development for the mc and other characters

how u Black and pale a the same time Do u mean like ashy 😅

thy just keep saying shit like were supposed to know wat it is. this story doesn't understand scope and the how to properly implement the things mentioned in the story and implement it to the world. this is a generic edge self-incert story

the quality of the writing and potential world building is very good the problem is with 2 things most side character are not developed enough and the Racist story building of characters other then white in this book as the all or most Black/ colored characters are either submissive/barbaric slaves/crimes and whorse and th whites in this story are powerful and justice despite all that they do