ALittleSickMan
All hail the abyss! It's glorious and fucked up in a fucking really weird way! But it's good and I read good stuff.
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Five stars for motivation. I try to give my most honest opinion: -I didn't understand much of the start -If the chapters are divided by the author like in the first chapter it looks really bad. -It's really confusing and it sounds like the author is trying to set up a kind of mysterious mood, but it really isn't going well. I can't really explain how to do it better but someone who can do it really well is NoWoRRyMaN, I recommend looking into any of his books for reference. -If you aren't using Grammarly already, I recommend you use it. You don't have to pay, just the free version is already good enough I hope something here is useful and incentives you, the author, to write more. The more you write the better it gets.
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I'm not too much of a fan of systems either... The quests at the start, as described won't last long. The bestiary is only for more information and world-building. And the scanner is more like a power than a part of the system. For now, it doesn't do much more than showing status and I don't know if I will change it... I like it only to get a better feel of the protagonist's power
corrected, thanks
Corrected, Thanks
I think this caused some misunderstanding. I will change it so it gets clearer.
Kaguya-sama
Something like this