Ah, I see. Now that makes some sense!

Wow, this sentence is too long. Please make it there sentences or more, it's easy to read that way

I like how the writer could tell a scene vividly and how natural the dialogue are. But what bothers me a lot is the logic. I mean... The MC murdered her boyfriend and... Well, it might be just a differ sense of taste haha

The writing is good, but the logic really bothers me haha.

Wait... The MC murdered her boyfriend, right... Then, why it was shrugged off like nothing?

Oh no, the MC is too strong emotionally. I think it might not be my cup of tea...

Wow so long, please make it two or three sentences, it helps the reader

Very nice, I like the story progression. though through the first 5 chapters, I haven't seen a correlation between the prologue and the rest chapters. The writing is nice, but it might be better if you avoid brandishing the paragraph with long sentences and keep some straightforward.

Wait, whaaaatt? I find it hard to believe the logic here. They were hostile but then begged Raizel help? Why?

Typo, do not use ' for a dialogue, but "

What a mood swing haha

The content is great but I think you used too much flowery phrases to describe things. There's many paragraph you could straightforwardly describe or tell with simple words.

Ups, you're using too much as if. Maybe use another phrase? Or simplify the paragraph?

No one died yet?

Oh no death flag fufufu

Wow, that's a nice world building you got there. Hey, would it be better if the organization objective remained a mystery?

Soldiered on? Wow, that's an uncommon word, still you can use it, but there is a better choice like pressed on or continued on etc

oh no, broke up the paragraph or shorten it 😊

Yess, I finally understand as I read the next chapter.

Well, unless she said something long, I think you don't have to separate her sentence in a dialogue. (The main reason is... it's a waste of space if you plan to print it hahaha)