DivineFifteen
Lv3
An astrophysics specialist. Except there's no jobs. So doing nothing.
2019-05-29 入りましたCanada
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DivineFifteen2 years agoコメントI liked the setup of the story and the mysteries involving Hirow. I'm definitely curious about how everything will turn out. One thing I will note is that the chapter needs a bit more editing, whether it be in sentence structure or grammar. I'm not sure I really relate to Hirow either, since I don't know much about him beyond the little introductions included. I think a bit more characterization and world development (without being too info-dumpy!) would be a good direction. Overall, I like the potential!
- DivineFifteen4 years agoに返信 Warbeast262
Thanks for the review. :) I try my best, and I hope I will continue to meet your expectations!
