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f3f316dコメントThe way they are speaking feels like they are robots. People in office talk normally but with respect, not like some type of chat gpt thingy. Is also a problem for you author because you lose the chance to give them original characteristics to each character making them more real. Also instead of expressing every feeling with dialogs sometimes i better to describe the body language only. Last thing. You are writing in first person, so is not good to change povs to other character, the beauty of first person, is that we the readers learn with the mc, making things more mysterious. And you author having an easier time making plots, personality and showing the thoughts of the mc. Sorry for the criticism, i really like the story i think it has a lot of potential. I would hope that he didn’t have an AI that will steal a lot of scenes and chances to enrich the story. But the whole Internet thing is great.
"Thank you, Susan. Your contribution is indispensable to our success. Let us continue to collaborate in revitalizing Majestic Publishing," William concludes, his optimism infectious.- f3f318dコメント
Please stop writing dialogs like a script format. This is a novel, use proper labels and writing dialogs. Use “ “. instead of : If you have problems describing who is speaking just write he said, she said or the name of the person. Is boring to write but we readers won’t really notice in the flow of the story. Instead of you writing, Carlos: hello how are you? like script, you could go Carlos said, “hello, how are you?” if not it cut the flow down. Also not to insult, but when writer do that it reeks of lazyness.
Karl: William, it's good to see you. How are you feeling this morning? It's been a long time since I last saw you smile like that. - f3f31mthに返信 chh_ota_beam
Only in countrys with bad food laws.
I was taller, obviously. I had better be too! Cadbury has been making me chug raw eggs every morning since my growing pains began - I'd be livid if I hadn't put on height. - f3f31mthに返信 KexKexKex
Snakes fans need to touch some grass.
"You might as well take all the points at once, because every time you speak, I'll respond right back," Rose replied, smiling broadly, her hands behind her head. Her incredibly blue eyes stared at Snape with clear amusement dancing in them. - f3f33mthコメント
Like the force? literally just blame it on the force? like…
Carl paused trying to find the best way to explain. " well I guess first thing to say, I'm not from this reality." - f3f33mthコメント
ice on beer?
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Sorry man but i refuse to donate to a GpT story.
Buy me a Cofee: https://ko-fi.com/saffronknight - f3f33mthコメント
I swear people act as if we asked to be born or something. Most parents have kids for selfishness. If they were really that bothered to make the world better they would have adopted. You don’t owe what you didn’t ask for.
Leon knew he was being too disrespectful and shouldn't speak like this to someone who had carried him for 9 months. - f3f33mthコメント
Just no so early in the story. I don’t know of a single one who didn’t become awfull after the kids.
この本は削除されました。 - f3f33mthコメント
Midnight in paris is great.
He continued, listing each project with practiced ease: "Seth Rogen's got a dramedy called '50/50' in the mix, could be a good laugh. Then there's 'Like Crazy,' an independent romance from an independent newcomer. And even an international offer – 'Midnight in Paris' from a French studio, intriguing premise..." - f3f33mthに返信 Naruto420
Back in the day people hated Keanu. Like there wasn’t a day that they didn’t insult him.
What Sean didn't know was that Lucas's days on set, surrounded by the likes of Leonardo DiCaprio, Ken Watanabe, and Tom Hardy and the others, had unwittingly polished his social skills and fostered a newfound confidence. The constant exposure to the celebrity spotlight, once daunting, had become a training ground. He learned to navigate the public eye, his initial awkwardness replaced by a measured ease. - f3f34mthコメント
From the misogynistic brand favored by men with fragile egos? I 100 percent would expect it 😆
Leaving Cary's icy domain, Vincent cast a concerned glance at Lucas. "I'm so sorry, Lucas," he said, his voice laced with regret. "I didn't expect such...harshness from D&G. Truly disappointing." - f3f34mthコメント
I mean. A stylist who uses dolce is not someone you want anyway.
"I'm afraid my generosity has its limits, Mr. Smith," Cary interrupted, his voice cold as the mountain air. He then turned to Lucas, "We only dress stars, darling. Perhaps try your local thrift store next time." - f3f34mthコメント
This story feels more AI generated by the day.
The wheels of the plane kissed the tarmac at Salt Lake City Airport, a gentle sigh escaping Lucas as the engines whined down. He unbuckled, excitement bubbling in his chest as the scent of anticipation hung heavy in the air. The Sundance Film Festival was a mere breath away, and even the sterile airport buzzed with a creative energy. Movie posters plastered the walls, whispers of upcoming premieres danced on the wind, and a palpable sense of artistic camaraderie thrummed beneath the fluorescent lights. - f3f35mthに返信 SolwWhile after Jiang Xu sat back in his place, his gaze was quickly drawn to the unremarkable girl sitting at the last position in the first row.detailTaking advantage of the beauty being poor, fooling her into being my girlfriend都市 · Peace every year
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Challenging moment? You have a system that tells you everything...
Things became white-hot as the competition reached its peak 12 days later, when Alex faced a challenging moment. - f3f35mthコメント
The story is becoming worst each chapter. at least the first ones were edited and trying ( and failing) to be written by a person. but the last chapters are clearly copy pasted from a AI generated chat. Not even a pay one....Really disappointed.
The headlines varied, but the contents of the articles carried the same theme, they were surprised that a new, upcoming young fellow like Alex would overreach and dare to pair himself up to the level of a young second generation like David.