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Lol, those goddesses have lived for millions of years. And isn't it perfectly something a best friend sometimes does. Your making him a hypocrite. He doesn't even know anything and only basing it on to something he knew from anime. This move downgrades the whole quality of your novel. He isn't even that important yet. I also find it confusing how his accepted by his goddess so easily? Isn't it perfectly unreal, we are suppose to be observing someone before getting close to it. Though I didn't know about her eye power.
Campion is one too
Also Tales of Demons and God's. Or the Super Gene
How about Toriko? It has power system strong enough to rival God's. If your read the Manga and watched the anime. And, there is pretty much little to none Toriko fan fics around.
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You should fix your plot. It is messy and sometimes hard to understand what's going on. My advice is that you first know what is your end goal and start how you'll accomplish that goal. Divide it into how many chapters each AU he'll visit then write his power gains per AU as to ensure that he's not too powerful in the early chapters. I can already see that this novel is already dying. Try my advice if you create another novel.
You should put you authors note chapters at the authors note section of every chapters at the bottom. It takes to much chapters and inflates the count.
It's a good chapter though
You make him too kind. It's almost unrealistic, every person has that 7 deadly sins, if not, he's not a human then. Though It'd be a more realistic if he was a Pastor or a pope