Darwin111111
No hay mucho que quiera decir, quiero ganar algo de dinero haciendo mi pasatiempo (Entrenamiento) para luego hacer una novela.
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Sorry. Is Spanish
Sorry. Is Spanish
Seriously, what is this about? Context is missing. In addition to being difficult to read, it lacks the aforementioned.
La trama... Realmente no la entiendo. No se explica nada.
It seems good, although I want the original source, I understand that from your original translation it must be shit grammatically speaking.
You know that the feeling of love does not come from the heart... Right? It's just that your pupils dilate and your heart races when you are with the person you love. Even similar things happen if you're just excited. Ancient people believed that because they didn't have the technology to prove otherwise. I mean, your heart beats strong when you're with the person you like. Why would they think of anything else if not the most notable thing? But the reality is that the heart only pumps blood and nothing like giving you a feeling like love.
Yes... The problem with these stories is that the protagonist simply uses the powerful items immediately without having a well-established goal. I mean, yes, you want to protect the planet, but that's very ambiguous. How much time are you willing to sacrifice and how much do you want to protect the planet? What are you specifically threatening? In these stories the best thing to do is not go from 0 to 100 or too slowly. If you do it slowly, not by showing a standard romance plot that is everywhere, but by putting its goals, but also its difficulties, into perspective. Just watching things happen suddenly, already done, like a building creation loading bar in a game, is boring.
Honestly, in my opinion the extended 'screen' romance is taking up too much text, becoming redundant. I think I speak for many when I say that most of us who read fanfics don't want to watch a LONG romantic drama. If you are going to do it, my recommendation is to make it as short and simple as possible. The detail is in the simple. The simple displays of affection and that's it. You're just tired of the drama.
Actually the fanfic is fine. It doesn't have the most original premise, but it's not like fanfics with these premises are very good either. Compared to many others this one, from the little I have seen, can be considered good. The protagonist has a clear goal and things didn't go from 0 to 100 very quickly. There are no decisions made just because without being explored... No sense. And I don't see, on the surface, any flaws in the narrative or some crazy and incredibly unrealistic or stupid decision.
That's why he hated Rob's episodes. It just feels more meaningful to appear with powers in another world than to have a god take you to another world granting wishes. Mainly because wish-makers make very specific wishes and literally some don't make the strongest ones because they want to make them 'interesting' which is stupid when you think they haven't tasted what it's like to have absolute power.
Wow, a kid out. Although I don't understand what you're complaining about. If you erase his memory and he's still evil, amen. Not everything in the world is good but you will know that it will not bother you. Although, well, I guess I just don't agree that I didn't give him the benefit of the doubt..
Honestly, it seemed interesting with that Shinji thing, but it became boring when he was teleported to Chaldea and realized that he is not an Isekai. She was interesting in her own way because of the way the protagonist acted. But the point I made about Chaldea, I find it uninteresting. Probably preferences.
It goes from 0 to 1000. The pace of this novel is too fast and you can't allow yourself to enjoy anything. . .