Delvogen
Just someone who hopes to have his very own successful book one day. patreon.com/Lovetoread813
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Delvogen11d発表Amazing start! I’m thrilled to see where this story goes. Your idea is one of the most original I’ve seen in a while, and Ron’s humor is a delightful addition. Overall, it’s incredibly enjoyable. Having read hundreds, if not over a thousand, of Harry Potter fanfics, I can confidently say this is one of the best beginnings I’ve come across. I’m eager to see what else you have in store.
- Delvogen1mth発表
This fan fiction is impressive, offering a bit of everything for readers. I've read up to chapter 97, and the story continues to captivate as we approach the second year. Most characters remain true to the original canon while still showcasing unique and original elements. That being said, there are quite a few problems with the wording used, mostly in the later chapters that I have read. An example would be: uses her instead of him. Still giving it 5 stars because I enjoyed a new Harry Potter fan fic coming out.
- Delvogen2mthに返信 Shadow_Guest
Thanks. It has been corrected.
この段落は削除されました。 - Delvogen3mthに返信 zahra_kianpour
I owe you
"I understand, Harry, I do. I admit I need the money," Mike said with a gentle smile. "But I can't just take it without giving something in return. I'll write you an IOU. It might take me a while to repay, but I swear I will." - Delvogen3mthに返信 HadrianPeverell
It's crazy, but I've been remembering it incorrectly for years.
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I agree, Lector. In addition to that, there are numerous errors with pronouns, names, and several off-putting remarks. Furthermore, the author seems to struggle with maintaining consistency with what was written in the earlier chapters. I try to keep things running smoothly, but I'm aware that sometimes things sound off. Anyway, hope you all like it.
Ch 26 Chapter 26 - Delvogen3mthに返信 OukisLips
They have Snape.......
During the luncheon, Dumbledore highly praised Mike and even earned 50 points for Ravenclaw, putting Ravenclaw ahead of Gryffindor and second only to Slytherin. - Delvogen3mthに返信 callylloyd
thanks
"Our dear Mr. Tully is quite a tough character. Not only does he have a surprising talent in combat, but he also possesses a ruthless heart," Snape said in his signature low voice. - Delvogen4mthに返信 UncleMonkey27
Done, thanks.
この段落は削除されました。 - Delvogen4mthコメント
Thank you Sami_Alfoheday. Fixed. Also, I changed the wording so it is not used multiple times in a short time, and corrected his name.
This becomes clear when considering their head of house, Filius Flitwick. The notion that an academy primarily composed of scholars could have a combat champion as its head challenges the stereotype that Ravenclaw is merely a haven for bookworms. - Delvogen4mthに返信 Sami_Alfoheday
Fixed. Also, I changed the wording around so it is not used multiple times in a short amount of time.
この段落は削除されました。 - Delvogen4mthに返信 Questi0nMa7k
ya, I wanted to change it. When I first started reading this I thought he ate Sirus!
They had assumed that Mike, a boy not even eleven years old, facing a large dog that stood to his waist, would try to scare it off or repel it. However, to their utter surprise, Mike had chosen to kill the large black dog and, it seemed, prepare it for his dinner. - Delvogen4mthコメント
Guess I will give it to him. He was empowering himself to fight the dog, right?
He never woke up again. Seizing the opportunity while still empowered by his magical outburst, Mike bound him to a large stone and tossed him into the river beside Diagon Alley. - Delvogen4mthに返信 Sleeping_dragon26