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[The Lazy and Shy Author] [ FB: Jadeite Green ] [Subscribe on:Youtube] https://youtube.com/@JadeiteGreenAuthor?si=Jp5h5c2tXAlMpywy [ Twitter: Jadeite Green ]
2019-01-09 入りましたPhilippines
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Jadeite_Green9mthコメント[Sacred Doctor's College, Philippines]- Jadeite_Green9mthに返信 UelUelPeta is surely taking her sweet time tonight. I really have an urge to sleep, so I gently shut my eyes, getting ready to slip into a much-needed slumber.
- Jadeite_Green9mth発表
Hello, Author. From what I've read in chapters 1 through 3, there appear to be some errors, such as incorrect use of punctuation, and starting in chapter 4, you only focus on the character's dialogue. In order to increase the readers' interest in your story, add more description of the setting as well as details about the characters' actions and thoughts. That's all, continue the wonderful job.
- Jadeite_Green9mthコメント
I think it is better if you do not use capital letters in this line.
この段落は削除されました。 - Jadeite_Green9mthに返信 Alejandro_Del_ReyCh 1 Hayeon Yujin
- Jadeite_Green9mthコメント"Are you kidding me, Seth, why do you ask me such a strange question in the middle of those nuisances?"
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- Jadeite_Green9mthコメントAbigail looked confused at first and pouted, looking extremely depressed as traces of sadness appeared on her face. "You… You didn't even let me finish. I was so close to the ending!"
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I'm enjoying your story so far. keep up the food work❤❤❤
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