Yeah, but you would at least wouldn't do the criticism in front of matriacrh out of respect for her.

Also, the grammer is not bad at all. Not to the extend that you would bother to leave a comment about it.

Since I started reading Mtl, i became immune to bad grammer. For those who complain, I suggest they start reading some mtl.

You would think you need a light for a shadow to exist, right?

I hate mind control. I think it kills the story if used to obtain loyalty, manipulation, and such. It just leads to an uninteresting plot.

So it was the color of his eyes that she found a problem with. I thought she meant the perverted look in Mc's eyes lol. I was like how degenerate the Mc has to be to look that way even in a newborn baby.

Love the chapter. It is much better than Oberyn simply going along with Mc's wishes one way or another. Oberyn was simply looking for adventure, not to submit to a rather intelligent 5-year-old. I'm waiting to see what kind of butterfly effect this will have in the future.

Just keep writing, that is the most difficult part. You have good grammer too. Although I pointed out something I felt is a plot hole, don't be pressured to rewrite chapters or restart your book to fix things up. I believe that is a trap most new authors face. Most rewrites don't surpass the chapter number of the old one before quitting.

From what I remember although Oberyn had a laid-back character, he also had a hot temper and overconfidence that resulted in his death. I would love to see Oberyn forming a grudge against MC with this and breaking their relationship. I think Mc was really wrong in his approach. I don't see Oberyn letting Mc force his rules on him.

Let's say the 2 armies of these kingdoms fought until noon when Mc's father died. After defeat Mc's kingdom falls back to castle to defend. The enemy launches an attack without any delay because of the arrogance of the previous victory. Mc defends the walls until nighttime. Launches a night raid and uses fire to create chaos in enemy camp.

I can't think of anything that a medieval setting equivalent of petrol or something that can catch fire really quickly for a surprise effect. Even if there were I don't think there was any time to implement it since i believe it was after a disastrous defeat that ended with a fallen king. Simply relying on castle walls and taking advantage of an arrogant enemy would have been better in my opinion. If the castle walls weren't effective against trainees and apprentice knights they wouldn't bother building them.

How is Oberyn gonna be in his family? How does that work? At first I thought Mc was suggesting a marriage between families. Maybe I'm too tired to understand, will probably re-read it tomorrow.

No matter how dry, I can't see wheat catching fire fast enough to scare an army. It would take way more than that to cause an immediate fire like that.

Author, you really scared me with all the info dump at the beginning. At least it was an interesting enough concept to keep me going. I'm glad I was patient enough.

He is 5, born in 269 AC.

Mc's reaction is lackluster... I thought he was prideful. He could not save his mother with the powers he personally chose and used to heal her. What we got was a weird stare between Tywin and the Mc while his mother just died.

He will not die but it will probably lead to a plot armor power-up, since they even bully him away from the kaiju he beat. It's just disappointing.

Now he can't put anything in the system space or enter it, right ? The flame is there.

What is considered common knowledge changes with time. You need someone with a brilliant mind first to realize why the apple from the tree falls to the ground to be aware of the thing called gravity and base further knowledge on this.