Worlds Defenders

Hi, I'm the author of this novel. This idea has been in my head for a few months and just started writing it down. Please give your honest reviews so I can improve this novel.

Mostly enjoyable with stabile chapter release and fast storyline progression. But please get yourself a proofreader and editor. Because especially your usage of present and past tense is headache inducing.

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Interesting so far, I'm not a huge fan of the way it's all written in present tense. I'm much more comfortable reading stories in past tense, but ultimately, it's the authors choice. The quality of the writing itself is alright, the author definitely could definitely improve though as there are frequent grammer mistakes. For the story, I'm enjoying it so far, the pacing has been good and the defender system seems well thought out. Overall, I'm looking forward to seeing how the story progresses, and how the author improve and grows as a writer.

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Great story but it looks like it's been dropped by the author. Good to use as an exp farm in the meanwhile................................................

Story has promise how my heart aches for more more more more more plz give me more *sigh* Alas I can only wait for the next chapter till then i must prowl on this lonely road of cultivation with no inspiration

So far that I have read it is going to be a very good book and I hope more people see it so they can see how good it is.

This chapter keeps getting better and better I can’t wait tell the next chapters come out so please write the next chapters soon so I’ll be able to read it and please don’t stop writing this book

Bro have you dropped the story We need at least a chapter explaining your situation I’m about ready to remove her from my libraryAnd for the rest of the 140 characters update update update update date update update update update update update update update update

Hi. I was just wondering, have you dropped this? Or are you just taking a break? Please, PLEASE keep going with it, it's a great novel, especially for an original (is my second favourite for an original), but even including the translated novels, it's still one of my favorites! Please don't give up on it! But... if you have given up on it, please let me/us know so I/we can stop hoping and checking for new chapters. Love your work, Cheers, Guy

Really like this novel so far, at times you can find a few good originals. I implore anyone who reads this to give it a solid try. One thing I really like is not the constant need to be with his family, and force the family in the story. But, still not neglecting them. It's one of the worse flaws some authors have. Where the have this weird need to install a family member in every chapter. I really like the timeskip, and just simply the development. My only real criticism is... Why is this written in present tense? It just feels so weird to me. "He went to the door because it *IS* open right now" instead of "He went to the door because it was opened for him". Those aren't direct quotes, but I hope my point is seen. It feels odd, obviously because it's what I'm used to.

Grammar needs some work. Otherwise a great story. It actually reminds me strongly of super gene joust with more logic, common sense, likable characters and much much less plot armor.

This is one of the best original stories on the site! The grammar of the author is very good and the story flows better than translated works on this site. I can't wait for more chapter!

A really enjoyable story so far. It has interesting game elements and a cool MC. The story is just getting going but it surfaced one or two times and seems very interesting. Certainly enough to propel things forward and make you want to see what happens. It's a little 'thin' at times, like the descriptions of what's happening aren't amazing all the time and it moves pretty fast. But it's not really a drawback, just an alternate style. And his writing in general is like that, the author uses the present tense a lot which is odd at first but you soon get used to it. I highly recommend it, it's easy to into and compelling as you read more. Keep it up author!!

This is good.....try it.....................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................

A very well written novel I hope very much for a regular edition of the chapters and for conducting the story to the end. THANKS THANKS THANKS THANKS THANKS THANKS THANKS THANKS THANKS THANKS THANKS THANKS THANKS THANKS

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