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Ultimate Goddess System

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After undergoing a traumatic experience set up by her stepsister, Xiao Yunhua ended her life at the tender age of eighteen. Instead of going on to the afterlife or the cycle of reincarnation, she found herself forced to bound to a goddess system. For the condition of going to different worlds and stealing the hearts of different ‘targets’, Xiao Yunhua was promised unparalleled beauty and talent. But the further she went, the more that she realized there was a sinister ploy at play. The system that was meant for making her feel and be more beautiful... was all a game of manipulation? ____________________ 7+ updates every week, depending on how busy author is. Current cover is based on arc/volume TWO. Cover will change when there’s a new arc/volume. Join the Discord family! https://discord.gg/rrZguqp where there will be spoilers, future arc cover reveals, and general chatting about anything. STARTS OFF VERY DARK (check the rating), BUT TIES BACK TO THE END OF THE BOOK. Actual book starts on about chapter 18 when things begin to progress, so before then, please be patient. There is also a review posted by the author that clarifies some things (contains SPOILERS). This book is technically a quick transmigration book, although each arc (volume) is really long. This is NOT a harem in any way. There is a ML. Just be patient, surprisingly...I know what I’m doing and it’ll tie together lol That’s all. If you end up reading, then happy reading! Otherwise, thank you for checking out this book

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Chapter 11.1.1: The Adopted Granddaughter - EDITED

When Xiao Yunhua heard the ding, an immense amount of light blinded and surrounded her. Her heavy and numb body suddenly felt like vitality was rushing through it. Xiao Yunhua glanced around and noticed that she was floating in a dull, grey-like place that was covered with endless mist and fog. There wasn't a sign of anything other than herself.

Suddenly, she heard a childish cough. She turned around and noticed a small, chubby fairy with cute monarch butterfly wings giving her a stare. The fairy was wearing a blue dress that had trimmings of a golden-orange and a pair of small, black slippers. Her hair was styled into two space buns being held by orange and blue scrunchies. Her big, silver eyes were staring with a mixture of curiosity and pity. Xiao Yunhua didn't know why this little bubble was giving her pity, but she had a feeling that it was based on her life the past few days.

"Welcome!" The squeak-like voice greeted. "I have chosen you as my host for the Ultimate Goddess System."

"Why?" Xiao Yunhua asked, her insecurities suddenly filling her head. Why would such a cute little thing pick her and not her perfect stepsister? She wasn't worth anything, and her family's constant scorn was the proof.

"Because..." I pitied you and so did the Creator. But the little fairy didn't say that. Instead, she said, "Because you and your name were randomly generated instead of going on to the afterlife."

Xiao Yunhua felt as though there was a lie involved, but she decided not to question it too much. After all, this was a miracle. Not only would she be able to live, but most likely, she would be blessed with heavenly looks like her protagonists in her novels.

However, despite her belief, the little fairy giggled when she heard her thoughts. "Sorry, but you'll have to work hard to be beautiful. It's not granted to you like your female protagonists."

"You can read my thoughts!?" Xiao Yunhua exclaimed in shock, to which the little fairy nodded.

"I can't help it though. Everything that goes on in the space is immediately told to me, including your thoughts." The little fairy explained apologetically. "Anyways, my name is Xiao Taotao and I'm your assistant for this long journey!"

"Why is it long?" Xiao Yunhua asked, to which Xiao Taotao sighed.

"You need to accumulate one hundred million points to officially finish and live peacefully."

Hearing the astonishingly large number, Xiao Yunhua gaped. And what did Xiao Taotao mean by points?

"Pretty Points. They're accumulated by pretty much anything. For a good deed, for a good plan, even for getting the respect of men or women. The more a man is impressed with you, the more points you can earn. Using those points, you can trade them in to use for anything. Either a skill, beauty product, or even an object!" Xiao Taotao explained meticulously. "When you successfully make a mission fall in love with you, you get a Beauty Boost, which is basically a large number of Pretty Points and a gift of picking a free skill."

Nodding as she understood, Xiao Yunhua suddenly asked, "For each mission, how many points will I get from the Beauty Boost?"

"It depends on how powerful the target is." Xiao Taotao said. "The higher the status or power, the more points. In fact, a commoner or any person without authority gets you ten points. An officer or soldier or doctor or surgeon or someone in that wavelength gets you one hundred points. A minister or someone of high authority in the military, like a general, gets you one thousand points. A marquis, baron, lawyer, or anyone of that range gets you ten thousand points. A prince or a duke gets you one hundred thousand points. A king gets you five hundred thousand points. An emperor gets you one million points..." Xiao Taotao hesitated but continued, "And finally, a god gets you ten million points."

"Wow!" Xiao Yunhua exclaimed in shock. "But how will I meet a king or an emperor or even a god in today's world?"

"You'll travel to different worlds and settings. Sometimes historical, sometimes fantasy, or sometimes even horror. Maybe even a futuristic setting, or at least considered futuristic by your time's technology. And a king doesn't have to be a literal king. It can be a business tycoon for example that has the authority and respect of a king." Xiao Yunhua nodded hearing Xiao Taotao's explanation.

"What happens if I fail to make them fall in love with me?"

Xiao Taotao sighed as she squeaked fearfully, "Nothing good! Your soul will extinguish for good and you'll never reincarnate! It's a survival game set by the Creator."

"Who is the Creator?"

Xiao Taotao shook her head. "Restricted information. Sorry, can't tell you." Seeing Xiao Yunhua giving up her curiosity, Xiao Taotao slowly added, "Your missions may require you to sleep with your target..."

At the reminder of sex, Xiao Yunhua paled when she remembered her virginity being taken away so savagely in her previous life. She didn't want to do anything that would remind her of that horrible experience, but if she denied, then her soul would extinguish. She had already been given this chance to relive herself to feel and be beautiful, so sacrificing a few things shouldn't be that hard.

In fact, she would probably not have to do that for a long time. She would cross that road when she got there. For now, she wanted to begin to accumulate Pretty Points already.

"No worries, you can start after I'm finished instructing you." Xiao Taotao's voice interrupted her thoughts. "Sometimes, someone may fall in love with you that's not your mission. You shouldn't worry about that because it'll just get you more Pretty Points."

Seeing Xiao Yunhua nod again, Xiao Taotao asked, "Do you have any other questions?"

Xiao Yunhua shook her head. "Are you sure? Because once you start, I can't help you much. You will only be able to summon me for questions or to use up your Pretty Points. Everything else is determined by your skills."

Xiao Yunhua pursed her lips nervously but nodded again. Xiao Taotao sighed as she snapped her small fingers and Xiao Yunhua found herself surrounded by a bunch of girls that looked to be in elementary school. They all held sneers as they regarded Xiao Yunhua with animosity.

<<Good luck!>> Xiao Taotao's voice rung in Xiao Yunhua's head. <<For your first mission, you must make Zhou Feng fall in love with you!>>

Xiao Yunhua sighed as information regarding her body filled her head. She was also called Xiao Yunhua, but in this world, she was raised as an orphan. One day, she was walking in a park near the orphanage when she saw an old man struggling in the lake. Despite only being eight years old, she tried to help the old man get out and prevent him from drowning. She succeeded, and the old man felt so grateful that he decided to adopt her from the orphanage.

The young Xiao Yunhua later found out that he was the Zhou Elder, the grandfather and old man that had the entire fortune of Zhou in his hands. The Zhou family was an influential family that was considered part of the top ten best families in what was a parallel world to China. So despite constant disagreement, Xiao Yunhua became the adoptive granddaughter of the Zhou Elder.

Even though she had the Zhou Elder's support, she was still constantly harassed and hated on by the rest of the family because they called her a gold digger, despite being so young. Even though a few months have gone by, she was still despised by the rest of the Zhou family, especially her adoptive cousins. Everyone except for a few adoptive cousins that didn't really bother with her like Zhou Feng and his three brothers, Zhou Ming, Zhou Lu, and Zhou Lang.

Out of the four boys, the order from oldest to youngest went like this: Zhou Ming, Zhou Lu, Zhou Feng, and Zhou Lang. The oldest was five years older than her, the second oldest was three years older than her, the third oldest was two year older than her, and finally, Zhou Lang was one year older than her.

Zhou Elder had three sons, the oldest being Zhou Lin, Zhou Guzheng, and the youngest being Zhou Qin. He also had one daughter, Zhou Hua, who was the youngest out of all his children. She was also the most spoiled, despite being in her thirties. But out of all his children, Zhou Elder favored Zhou Qin, the youngest, the most. This also meant that Zhou Qin's children, the four sons, including Zhou Feng, were Zhou Elder's favorite grandsons. All his sons were given birth to by his first wife, whom he divorced and never kept in contact with, while Zhou Hua was born by his second wife, Ling Xiu.

After his favored grandsons, he greatly favored Xiao Yunhua which earned her the jealousy of others and constantly got her bullied at school. She was mocked for being ugly and fat. Even at this moment, girls her age were bullying her and nobody cared enough to tell the adults around them.

"Xiao Yunhua you ugly and fat girl!" One of the girls shouted, "Why are you even adopted in the Zhou family? You will forever be fat, filth! Why are you even at our school? It's only for rich people, you bad girl!" The other girls nodded as they started to push her and pull her hair.

Xiao Yunhua looked around for anyone to help her, but couldn't find anyone in the isolated park. Out of the corner of her eyes, she noticed Zhou Feng and Zhou Lang walking together contently. Once they noticed her, they stopped. Instead of offering her assistance, they coldly regarded her and walked off, allowing her to be almost beaten to death.

Luckily, an old woman saw what was happening and scolded the elementary school girls before they could cause anymore damage. Once the girls were gone, she helped Xiao Yunhua attentively and gently.

"Little girl, where are your parents?" Hearing her words, Xiao Yunhua began to get into character as her eyes filled with tears. "I'm an orphan!"

The old woman's eyes filled with sympathy as she regarded Xiao Yunhua. "Do you live with anyone or do you live at the orphanage?"

Sniffing as more tears streamed down her bruised face, she answered, "I only have grandpa, but I'm not even his real granddaughter!"

The old woman sighed sympathetically as she understood what the little girl meant. She was adopted, yet she was still here alone without a guardian to take care of her. Was this how she was treated in her adoptive family? "Little girl, what's your name?"

"Xiao Yunhua." She answered obediently, grabbing the old woman's hand tightly. Seeing her behave so sweetly, the old woman couldn't help but feel warmth for the little girl.

"Do you want to come with me?" Hearing that line, Xiao Yunhua was suddenly afraid. This line was said by a stranger, meaning there was a fifty percent chance that her life could be in danger. But she felt like the old woman was not like the predators out there for children.

And even if she was, Xiao Yunhua was going to take a gamble and see what was going to happen. So instead of pulling away, she nodded and the old woman patted her head.

Xiao Yunhua followed the old woman to a small house that was surrounded by a small garden full of blooming flowers. She smiled when she smelled the lovely smell of the flowers, filling her lungs with fresh air.

The old woman patted her head affectionately when she saw how content Xiao Yunhua was acting. Once they arrived in the cozy and small house, the old woman poured Xiao Yunhua a cup of tea for her to sip to calm down.

When she saw Xiao Yunhua settle, she asked, "Yunhua, how would you like to be my granddaughter."

Xiao Yunhua's eyes filled with tears at the remembrance of her adoptive grandfather, to which the old woman quickly added, "No, no, not like your adoptive grandfather. I'll tell everyone that you're my flesh and blood, and you'll be treated as my flesh and blood."

Xiao Yunhua flashed her a smile as she nodded happily. The old woman felt very happy with the girl and Xiao Yunhua could feel two Pretty Points going inside her dimensional space.

She was confused as to why she was getting Pretty Points until she remembered that she was pleasing this old woman, so if she continued to make her happy, she could stock up on Pretty Points pretty quickly.

The old woman told her that she would now change her name to Han Yunhua, giving her the old woman's surname. Xiao Yunhua was happy to oblige and the next day, the old woman went to officially register her.

The people in charge of keeping records of people were a bit skeptical that an eight year old girl popped out of nowhere. But Han Mi, the old woman, reassured them that Han Yunhua was really her granddaughter and used to lived in a really isolated and remote area.

When they wanted to verify their blood relation, Han Mi used her cane to scold them for being disrespectful and doubting their elders. Since this parallel world seemed to deeply value filial piety and respecting elders, like some countries in Xiao Yunhua's real world, they decided to do as the old woman wanted and enlisted the little girl. After all, their boss was never going to discover this suspicious case nor would a little girl do much harm, right?

And thus, Xiao Yunhua, now Han Yunhua, lived contently with Han Grandmother with the next eight years, slowly perfecting her skills due to the constant Pretty Points she kept receiving thanks to her adoptive grandmother. She was also the smartest in her school, ranking at number one, so teachers constantly praised her intelligence.

In reality, she had already gone through school in her previous life. She was in a university, so for her to fail going to school all over again would have been embarrassing.

Not only that, but Xiao Yunhua had slowly begun to lose the extra weight that the eight year old had accumulated. Now, she had a slender body that shows that was paired with her chest and smooth skin that was the envy of all the other sixteen year old girls in her school. Using her Pretty Points, she spent so much on beauty products to the point that she was beautiful enough to be considered a little above average.

But Xiao Yunhua wasn't satisfied. She wanted to be beautiful enough to leave a goddess-like impression on those that saw her. Hence why she decided to begin the next part of her plan of getting her mission to fall in love with her. That way, she would get an abundance of Pretty Points and more a Beauty Boost with a free skill. So far, she had spent her Pretty Points on learning the art of cuisine, enhancing her memory to photograph measures, and she had also spent points on enhancing her senses to the point that nothing escaped her eyes and observation. Or basically her five senses in general.

But just those three skills cost her eight years of acting like an angel child! She thought it would be easy and that she would get new skills frequently, but since she hadn't even gotten close to her mission, gaining points was a bit difficult hence why it was difficult for her to learn new skills.

Spending eight years building a reputation of being absolutely perfect in everything, Xiao Yunhua was ready to begin the second part of her plan: meeting her mission and making him fall in love with her!

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yaoyueyiLv5

Honest, objective review below. Total rating: [3.8 stars] Writing Quality: [4 stars] -Was a bit harsher on this section because you said that the beginning chapters were “edited”, so therefore, I had higher expectations. -Despite being edited, there are still dialogue tag mistakes. (e.g. “It depends on how powerful the target is." Xiao Taotao said. "The higher the…” should be "It depends on how powerful the target is," Xiao Taotao said, "The higher the…” notice the commas?) -There are also little mistakes with more comma placement and sentence flow (right in the first chapter, in case you didn’t know). This makes the writing style somewhat chunky and not as smooth to read. Also, there are parts where the characters are asking a question, but it’s not a question mark?? Tbh it made me doubt that the chapters you labeled as “edited” are edited at all… -Problems with adverbs placed in awkward locations too. -Some problems with tenses. As I can see, the majority of your story is in past tense, but there are occasionally a few phrases in present tense that you should work to avoid. It’s best to keep the story in one tense or the other. -A few run on sentences… -TL;DR: Pretty good for Webnovel standards, but there are still mistakes in the edited chapters. Stability of Updates: [5 stars] Pretty good and stable! Story Development: [4 stars] -Feels really similar to the manhua, “Goddess Creation System” in a lot of aspects. (e.g. “pretty points”, the fact that the more powerful the target is, the person gets more points…) -Info dumps whenever there’s a main mission could be incorporated in a smoother manner. Was quite bored when the first one came up. Pretty much skimmed through it and just saw a bunch of Zhou’s. -Flow of the story is pretty good though in general. Pacing is pretty smooth and doesn’t feel like dragging too much! -However, at around where I stopped reading (Chapter 34), it was because I got bored and kinda stopped. This part might be biased or something, but I liked it better before the romance really kicked in lmao. -Also highkey guessing the big boss final character is the creator. -TL;DR: Okay pacing, but also, not the most original idea to ever exist. Character Design: [3 stars] -I... don't know how I feel about Yunhua?? LMAO I honestly don't know. Maybe it's because I'm never a fan of systems because they overpower the FL too much, and even though I know that the entire point of the thing is to let Yunhua become "perfect" because it's a "Goddess System" for a reason, but at the same time, I also think that it's difficult to make her a well-balanced character. She's not too perfect, but I can barely spot any flaws in her character. Maybe just give me like a week to carefully analyze every single action Yunhua did in the story and I'll be able to figure something out, but just from reading through this story, all I'm really getting is that she has nice morals?? idk tbh. -Zhou Feng is kinda flat. Never really felt anything for his personality. I know that you're likely doing a spin on the "cold male lead" trope, but I'm not really seeing where the spin is coming in yet. -Zhao Meiliang seems to be kinda b*tchy for no reasons either. I’m getting pretty sick of evil female antagonists existing for the sole sake of being evil. I get that Meiliang is tired of her mother comparing her to Yunhua, but how shallow and spoiled is this character to be this way if it’s just because of that that Meiliang wants to ruin Yunhua’s future?? And Yunhua acts like she’s all smart and stuff, but she’s kinda dense to not notice what kind of person Meiliang is since she’s constantly quoting these “novels” that she read and stuff. -Also, real funny how after Zhao Meiliang exists the storyline, two other evil female antagonists from the Zhou family appear. -Points to Ni Ming for being a fairly young female character that's not an antagonist. -Grandmother died, but I never really felt anything for her death... but that's probably b/c I don't get emotional easily so I didn't take any points off for that. I think you did a good job describing Yunhua's emotions during the scene though-- it's probably because I don't really know how to place myself in Yunhua's shoes because again... I find it difficult to understand her character that made me kinda just read through that chapter with a flat face. -TL;DR: Would like to see more character development, flaws, and dynamics. World Background: [3 stars] -There's not much revealed about the world, but it seems like a typical novel setting, so I just gave an average three star rating. -Have no thoughts about the system because it seemed pretty genius when I was reading the Goddess Creation System manhua but now, reading this one where it's pretty similar, it didn't seem really new or anything to me. Overall, I do think that most Webnovel readers would like it, but I think it's just a no for me. Maybe I'll pick it up again if I have time, but it isn't binge reading material for me, if that makes sense?

ValuexLv4

Imma have a long post and just tell how this is different from the others. Let me start off with the quick transmigration genre as a whole; all of them has systems (points, rewards, shop, stats, etc.), good-looking exceptional targets, a smart lead, missions, MC in original world is abused or overpowered, and obviously, different plots each world. Here’s the thing, it’s really hard to justify the word DIFFERENT because this exist in a genre where the premises are practically the same and you have to play with the rules of the genre just like how you can’t have one love interest then call it a one-of-a-kind-harem. Well technically speaking, each book is indeed different to any other books one way or another. Here’s the review (finally): in all of those premises I’ve mentioned, the author really tried to make it different than all the other QT novels, and trust me, I don’t feel any deja vu (the “I think I’ve read this somewhere before”) while reading this. 1. First, the system. You know how systems usually have 30% screen time? In here it’s about 5-10% on average. System does not just spoil FL with EVERY SINGLE detail. Most MCs usually use the PLOT as their cheat but since the system prevented our own FL, she gets to make her own coincidences. 2. No (or almost none) plot armor. There are no easy successes. No overnight magical victories. The FL fails and even she herself experience heartbreaks. She schemes, yes, but does not always succeed and takes time to execute; and those targets (so far) are all logical thinkers and don’t just randomly fall for her or mindlessly pursue her in the name of love losing their character in the process. 3. The FL’s emotions are very realistic and relatable. Most transmigrators usually are heartless and cold, and have very high IQ where they see the world just objectively. Our FL here is not that kind of person [maybe yet]. She’s guarded yet still vulnerable. She feels really human to me (Am I making sense?) and she’s just the right amount of intelligence and maturity where she still has space to grow and learn. JUST GREAT CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT! 4. Lastly, I have implied this throughout my comment: I think although this is a QT novel, the transmigration vibe is not really strong. Which I believe is a good thing. The FL is truly living her life there like a resident and treats people as REAL CONSCIOUS PEOPLE, unlike most QT where the other characters are, well, characters in a story with predetermined sets of actions. **. There ought to be similar stories out there but our author here is truly one of a kind. Her writing is on point and the characters are just sooo alive.

HarryLLCLv10

Writing Quality: 5 I’m not an native nor have I spoken English for a extremely long time so I can’t really judge a novel on it’s grammar and stuff. Didn’t notice any problems though so 5/5 Stability of Updating: 4 Well, I don’t have much to say about this. 7+ch/week like promised. Did have a minor issue a while ago but Author promised us it won’t happen again. So that’s why it’s a 4 instead of a 5 4/5 Story Development: 5 The speed is neither too slow or too fast. Spending just enough time in the targets’ world to not see it as a passing side story and really get connected with all the characters in that world, but also not too slow to the point where it get repetitive and boring. It hit the sweet spot right in between. Character Design: 5 All the characters are well thought out. They aren’t just flat characters which can be described in one sentence, but feel more like normal humans with complex thoughts. **Personal opinion**(more like me just being a fan girl (but I’m a man so should it be fan man? Nahh doesn’t sound right. Fan boy that’s it))I really really reaaaaallyy love how the grandmother that took care of the MC was written. I actually felt tears welling up in my eyes. 5/5(+infinite for grandma) World Background: 5 The world was well thought out, and so was the system. Don’t really have lots to say about World Background because I don’t know how to judge a story where the MC is constantly traveling to other worlds. Decided I couldn’t really penalize the overall score because of my inability to give a proper review, so yeah. 5/5 Overall: 4.8 Really happy I found this novel again. Really really happy. I mean it. Promise.

Dr_SaltedFishLv11

Picked this up randomly for my next review. Please heed the mature rating while reading this story, trigger warnings of abuse and rape. I honestly hated the prologue, the family's behaviour to MC comes off as too artificially exaggerated and topped off with the rape scene that made me cringe (I personally hate exaggerated abuse and rape scenes). The writing, however, was surprisingly good so I gave it another chance and decided to follow my typical ritual of reading to chapter 10 before reviewing. I actually read on for more than that before reviewing in the end. I have to admit, this story is a diamond in the rough. Up until where I left off, the MC is still an immature girl trying to play a game she thought she knew the rules to. To point out specifically, she was still emotionally stunted despite her age, typical for someone who went through abuse and trauma. Her charcater is realistic, and she does suffer from the consequences of her own actions. That was much appreciated since most stories tends to gloss over that for their protagonist. She has potential to be a properly fleshed out strong MC in the future. Story wise, world building and background is lacking, but that's not exactly the focus of the story. You know enough and it doesn't hinder the plot overall. I like that she stays in the world longer because she has multiple targets. Hopefully there will be more world building when an interesting world comes around. Obviously, there are plot holes and cliches. I also appreciate that the author doesn't wave the rape trauma all over the reader's face to solicit sympathy for the MC. The insidious undertones is also another nice touch to the story. Overall, it is a surprisingly good read and has potential to be better. Keep up the good work, it's going into my library.

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