The New Era Project

Hello all. After 3 years of immersing myself in the world of light novels both Japanese and Chinese, I will try my hand at creating one. This is my first project of such a scale. Any feedback/criticism is appreciated. I just hope that my time reading MTL doesn’t degenerate my grammar and spelling. lol. I also noticed this synopsis sounds kind of generic. Once I get further into the story, I might update it to make it less general. Just don't want to spoil anything. :v This is also being posted on RoyalRoad.

For a budding novel, the writing quality and grammar is definitely better and much more developed than other novels I find on Webnovel. I will be tearing into some points I found that might need improvement, and so some harshness will appear. So, the beginning of the novel. A decent pull, with an incident of paralysis of the main character, and the notion of dying and transmigrating into another world. However, the first chapter rings a severe alarm bell in my mind, and it would tell me to immediately drop it if such a problem isn't fixed in the later chapters: the lack of development, the all-accepting character archetype, and the systematic process of tell then show. First off, the novel transitions from an empty, open-ended background to an isolated environment, of which I take as either the "system's dimension" or the gateway between reincarnation. Just from the wording alone, the transition itself is rather choppy and sudden. The character jumps at the sound of an overhead voice in his mind, only to find himself in a new environment. There is no description of a transfer process, and the environment is rather vague in description, something that can be utilized to the author's advantage in world-building only if it is to be used again. That alone signals to me that if additional description isn't provided in the later chapters, the novel might as well be a can of dialogue. Next, the character is loosely developed, and is far too accepting of sudden transitions. When I state far too accepting as the character archetype, this is based off of how a "system" suddenly intrudes in his mind, and he doesn't panic except for the initial moment. Then he's accepting of it, and suddenly is capable of manipulating the system and requesting information as if he's used it for years. There's no description of the befuddlement or denial that ordinary characters would experience under such a circumstance, and even if he was described as an anime enthusiast, everything seems a bit rushed. The anime enthusiast trait should be carefully compounded in him slowly going over his memories of how the "system" seemed similar to the ones he had seen in the novels he read or the shows he watched. This also applies to the additional traits that the Main Character is supposed to have. A special trait pertaining to an ability is introduced, and then we have a snapshot of the main character having an occupation or hobby that related to that ability. No reminiscence, or compounded development, instead tossing them out as independent constructs. Although I can understand them to have relation, as the main character does possess the background to be familiar with such an experience or ability, the chapter doesn't introduce such a background or relationship at all, or does it rather poorly. Instead of writing that he had a background, a few more chapters flashing back to his previous life and especially the specified hobby or occupation will do wonders in developing the character and story (as the main character is a human). The main character being unfazed when facing an unknown or extraordinary experience is only acceptable if it's just an external appearance. The notion of experiencing teleportation should be accompanied with internal fear and panic at the very least, even if the character displays an indifferent, know-it-all expression. After all, the idea of human teleportation only existed in fantasy in the main character's previous life. Another error that would require revision is the story development and world background. As a transmigration novel, it is indeed acceptable to introduce a plethora of unknown, undefined concepts and ideas as long as they are explained or defined in the novel later on. However, after stepping into the "new world", where does the main character appear? What does the surroundings look like? In the novel, we have the main character step into an apartment building. He steps forth to exit, and quickly leaves. That's it. We don't know what the apartment looks like, whether it was different in some fashion to the ones in Earth, be it in structure, room design, or even the color of the wall. And instead of marveling at the new world and it's possible similarities or differences, the main character is only happy that nobody recognized him as a robber. It's just too sudden, and choppy to read. The other elements of the plot are also rushed. How does he fare in the examination? Just what questions did they ask, were they similar to the ones the main character faced? It seems like instead of the main character transmigrating, he's trapped in a dream. Everything is so vague, that it would require far too much imagination to construe a proper explanation or idea of what's being described or introduced in the novel. The flaws in world background stem to the lack of definition. I won't go into the rest of the novel's flaws, this should help you locate the rest of them and determine if you want to correct it or not. Since the novel only has 11 chapters, an overhaul to improve the character development, plot placing and world development would vastly improve the quality and appreciation of the novel. Overall, it's still a good read, and better than a good chunk of the ones I've seen on Webnovel so far. I'd add as a tip that whenever the system speaks, place the contents within [ ] to make it more distinguishable to the reader, especially if you have larger quantities of dialogue in the chapter. Good work!

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I'm not a big fan of system novels BUT this... is quite the gem. I'm going to start by saying how beautifully written and carefully detailed the chapters have been thus far. The author clearly invests and built a world that has already been introduced early on, allowing me to imagine and immerse myself in the story. This review was still written at the beginning of the novel so do take that under consideration. I would recommend this story for people who like different world settings, system novels and high quality writing with descriptive chapters.

To be frank your writing is utter garbage. The characters are unbelievable and flat, the setting is bland and uninspired, and the story isn't even that unique. So, let's take this for example. The protagonist stumbled upon the entrance examination of the students for the most PRESTIGIOUS academy possibly in the world (keep this in mind) and asks what's happening? Now you'd think that something like that would be known by at the very least the entire city? But whatever. Now, they answered him and he said, hey, what's this PRESTIGIOUS school that is known by the entire world, and they didn't feel suspicious??? Overall I'd give this story a 1/100 a total ****-fest don't read this if you have at least 2 brain cells

Nice flow of chapter. the writing is well done, until now the flow of words are excellent. the story has a nice path until now. the world background until now is only focused in important things to now, but at the same time is not a data-bank style. cant say about stability of updates right now, lets wait until ch.50. nice history!

The chapters are very descriptive. But unlike some system novels I read, the character development is pretty good and it keeps you interested in where the story will lead itself towards. For a beginner, it is rare to write a novel with such potential. Good luck.

Good plot, but it isn’t logical at all that the standard education of the best university in that world is equal to that of an average education in the past world, especially considering that the world is way more advanced with supernatural stuff.

I've only read three chapters, but I think that your story has a lot of potential! I'd rewrite a few things, but other than that, a splendid story you've written! Wish you the best on your endeavors! Fighting~! *heart heart*

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The story is pretty good so far with only a few grammatical errors. The MC is very funny and always has those great references to certain things. He also isn’t too BS overpowered and actually acts wisely sometimes. The story is developing well as far as I’ve read and the update stability is pretty good. At the point I’m at, there are still some things about the world that I’m curious about but I feel as if they might be in the future chapters. Other characters seem a little interesting and the system is sort of unique in a strange way. Not sayin that there is no system like it, but it just has a different charm to it. Overall it was pretty good and I look forward to future updates. Alexa play despacito 7 to celebrate!

I never read the story yet, but for all I know it could be bad or good. And sometimes luck really comes into a hassle of things as we perceive on our normal life. Luck is a weird word since it derives from the meaning of "chance". It can be good luck or bad luck that find it's way to intertwine with your life but you still live on and cast aside the possibility of luck in your life. Walking out of your house and being ran over by a car is possible but yet we don't think of such thoughts since the chances of that happening is low. But how come the chance of getting struck by lightning twice is higher than winning the lottery. So basically what I'm trying to say is the lottery is a scam and the author told me to write a 5.0 review.

It's well written considering its the authors first work. Alot of the names do sound familiar to LN and anime lovers 😛 I like the system, not too overpowered at the same time its not too hard to level up. The system bullying the MC is quite norm these days but by giving the system a form and also takeover option does make it look more like a spirit hiding in the MC body It's still in the starting stage so eagerly awaiting further chapters 😁

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The story is pretty good so far with only a few grammatical errors. The MC is very funny and always has those great references to certain things. He also isn’t too BS overpowered and actually acts wisely sometimes. The story is developing well as far as I’ve read and the update stability is pretty good. At the point I’m at, there are still some things about the world that I’m curious about but I feel as if they might be in the future chapters. Other characters seem a little interesting and the system is sort of unique in a strange way. Not sayin that there is no system like it, but it just has a different charm to it. Overall it was pretty good and I look forward to future updates.

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Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact geekyteddyyo@gmail.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.

Was fine until you gave the system a god damn personality that could take control of the MC. FUCK that. Shira(the system) should eat **** and die.

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