The Descent of Dawn

A great start, the Author is descriptive through their words giving us the reader a chance to imagine this world they have built. The first chapter was a beautiful taste of great writing from the technology advancement to the current world state, the pictures the author created through their words are admirable. Overall a great story

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This an epic sci-fi story. The story is set in a world which is being attacked by the abyss, some sort of huge dimension level dungeon with multiple layers. kind of like a tower but it goes down. Moreover like the name suggests, it as an extremely unforgiving and scary place. The MC is currently on a quest to look for a lost relative. The story mechanics, power system and sci-fi technology are extremely well thought out and detailed. The author's writing style and quality are amazing and I was sucked in right from the first chapter. The story flows so smoothly that I didn't even realize the passage of time. All in all this story has the potential of becoming a ranker. Best of luck author!

After you see that awesome cover, I read it and thought... It could be better. Right now what I can say is that I had troubles following the story. You should flesh out your characters more, your world more, and that's my advice. I don't know what you can do to make your book more accessible, but I'm pretty sure you'll figure it out. Good luck in the future.

In a sea of novels here, this story has a kind of originality. I got hooked just by the first chapter. Thats' rare to see so well written thing over here. The plot, world building is quite good for someone like me who read sooo many different stories.

A good start, alot of mysteries surrounding it, the word building is well planned and thought out, the characters are well executed. A new lease to everyone who likes this genre. Keep up with the good work

Vivid and excellent!. These are the two words that i think captures this novel comprehensively. Simply put, I loved it and i am sure that you would too.

I loved the start. It was an enjoyable read. The mc was someone who i could relate in so many ways. But the main thing is, your writing style is amazing. I would love to keep reading it. So keep up the good work.

Ask yourself am I showing or am I telling. You had so many opportunities to reveal character and heap empathy on the main character. You spent more time on exposition than you did anything else, in the first three chapters. I don't care if humanity developed advanced weapons. I want to see the main character using those weapons. I don't want to hear about his cold father. I want you to show me the despair. Fix this part of your game and I promise you will be a cut above the rest

I'll love the journey of azuma so far hopefully he will reach his goals. the world background is somewhere in another universe or in future.