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That Woman is a Wicked Vixen

作者: BerriApplepi
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(Status: HIATUS. Rewriting. Won't be updating until I have rewrote until the latest chapter.) Communication is NOT the key to a successful relationship. Comprehension is. It doesn't matter how much you communicate with a person... if they don't get shit, what good is communication? Stop dating stupid people. "Do you like me?" Jin Mingze asked as he gazed at her with seriousness. "I married you." "Yes, but did you marry me as a friend or like, a wife? Unclear." "..." This guy... She covered his eyes with her hand. "You're drunk, go back to sleep darling." --- She was tired. Tired of everyone's bullshit, tired of the schemes they all had for her. What did she do to deserve such treatment? So what if she's evil? So what if she's ruthless? So cruel? They turned her this way. Revenge was the only thing she wanted. They turned her into a monster, so why should she let them live happily? But life has another purpose for her. Life is a dick and it was fucking her so hard to the point where it made her meet the Devil that people feared. Well... it was not like it was a bad thing tho. He's handsome, rich, and he gives off big dick energy... He was the Devil who gave her life a meaning, the Devil who wrote her love story. When everyone betrayed her, he was the only person who took her side and loved her for the monster she became. ---- Author: BerriApplepi IG: @berriapplepi Discord: https://discord.gg/z56kkGG Donate: paypal.me/berriapplepie Cover is not mine it belongs to its rightful owner. Temporary cover only. Here are my other works! Try it out :D Modern Fairytale series: The Devil's Sleeping Beauty (Sleeping Beauty) Ten Years Late: The Bullied Husband (Little Red Riding Hood) Beast Under Her Dress: Princess, Don't Run! (Beauty and the Beast) (Snow White) - Pending My Evil Cinderella (Cinderella)

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Chapter 1Her Beginning

Beyond the horizon, the sun illuminated the shimmering haze of pollution. In the far distance, the silhouette of the skyline pierced through the warm glow like a jagged mountain ridge. Millions of lights caused the dense mass of skyscrapers glitter. People were needle points and cars were blood cells flowing through the veins of the city. Despite the time, the hustle and bustle never came to a halt. The city's residents were off for a movie or to chill out in a smoky bar downtown.

Ye Shuxin came from a poor family. Her mother worked as a prostitute and because of her mother's work, she got pregnant.

A six-year-old Ye Shuxin focused on the pile of homework in front of her. The loud music from the club could be heard in the dressing room, her concentration all for naught. Her mother couldn't afford to hire a sitter, so she usually takes her daughter to work and have her wait until her shift was over.

She wasn't like any normal kid, she was smaller than other normal six-years-old kids. Aside from that, she was never going to be normal especially when she grew up with such a parent. Her mind was forced to mature at such a young age.

There were times where she would go out and watch women dance around poles while men feasted and threw money on them. There were other women who were entertaining men on their tables and her mother was one of them.

As a child, she was curious about the things around her. She wondered about her mother's job.

Why are there no other kids around the place?

Why do her friends' mothers don't have jobs like her mom's?

Why are other ladies in her mother's workplace show so much skin? Why do they wear such skimpy outfits?

"Ye Shuxin, what are you doing here? Go back!"

Most of the employees there knew the little girl because of her mother and whenever she got caught by one of them, she would get scolded by them to go back to the dressing room. A place such as this one ain't exactly child-friendly after all.

Ye Shuxin's favorite place was her school. It was a place where she could enjoy studying with her friends. Once school ended for the day, she had to wait in the dressing room of her mother's loud workplace again. The school was her sanctuary. She very much enjoyed her time in elementary school. Never would she have known that it would all change in high school. She never would have guessed that something as insignificant as her mother's occupation would ruin everything for her.

The wind howled as the students arrived through the gates, hustling and bustling down the corridors. Friends were greeting each other with a hug or a playful punch while the newcomers stand petrified. The seniors stood tall and proud, a confidence born of experience. Soon the bells rang and everybody ran except for occasional slowcoach or chatterbox.

Ye Shuxin has always been a cheerful girl but having enrolled in a high school where none of her old classmates are, she kept to herself. She had a hard time approaching others and was quiet so others had a hard time approaching her too. If only she has someone she knew.

That month, she ended up being left out since no one was approaching a nerd-looking, quiet girl like her and because of that, she became the target of bullying, where the masterminds are composed of rich family offspring.

She was only able to enter such a prestigious school because of her high grades, she was able to get a scholarship through it. She was surrounded by rich kids and when they found out that she got into an elite school without paying for tuition, they spread bad rumors about her because of their jealousy. She came from a poor family and yet, she managed to top every exam. Their pride as rich kids were touched.

A rumor about her mother spread. It was said in that rumor that she slept with the director that's why Ye Shuxin got in the school.

"Hey, hey, did you know? Ye Shuxin's mom... She's a whore!"

"What?! Really? No way!"

"It's true! My mom said that she's a famous whore in the red district!"

"No wonder! Do you think the reason why Ye Shuxin has high grades is... you know, sleeping around with teachers."

Ye Shuxin gritted her teeth tight. She wasn't sleeping around with anyone! All her exemplary grades were because of her hard work!

Because of her anger, she slapped her desk, making the group of gossiping girls turn their heads on her.

"That's not true!"

The leader of the group who started the conversation smirked. She approached her and others followed behind like underlings.

"What's not true?"

"I am not sleeping around with the teachers!"

Gasps were heard. The other students in the room started looking her way.

"Oh? Then how about your mother? Are you saying that your mother being a whore is not true?"

Ye Shuxin pursed her lips. She couldn't deny something like that. She lowered her head and clenched her fists tight.

Since then, she was bullied almost every day because of her mother's background. This went on until her last year of high school. It was not fair. Why was she being hated because of her mother?

Despite the mistreatment others gave, no one could deny her intelligence because of her good grades.

"Ye Shuxin! What's with this bruise?!" Her mother was surprised when she saw the bruise on her daughter's arm.

"Are you being bullied?!"

It was as if the dam inside her broke and tears started flowing out from her eyes uncontrollably, "This is all your fault! I hate mother! Mother is a disgusting bitch! A whore! I'm already ashamed just by breathing the same air as you!"

It wasn't hard to deduce what happened after hearing her daughter's words. It's already understandable that the reason why she was being bullied was because of her mother.

"What a pussy." Her mother's voice turned cold, even her stare turned blank as she pushed her daughter away from her, making the child fall on the ground. "When I was your age, I had nothing! I wasn't even able to attend school! You should be grateful you're blessed with these things! Ungrateful brat! Who do you think allowed you to go to school? Whose money did you spend every day? Oh gosh! You're so annoying! I wasted so much money on an impudent child like you!"

"You don't like your life? Guess what, Shuxin? You're not going to have the life you want without having money! Do you think people will just give you whatever you want for free? Nothing's free! Everyone has to find a way to survive this fucking place! If others try to take those blessings away from you then you should bare your fangs and fight back!"

Ye Shuxin continued on sobbing on the floor. She couldn't say anything to refute her mother's words.

"You have to struggle and fight to survive this world. This damn place ain't filled with rainbows and butterflies. Not everything will go your way!"

She has to... struggle and fight? Her mother's words hit her like cold water.

How can she fight those girls from her school?

Since that day, Ye Shuxin decided to change. She was not going to endure the bullying that others gave.

...

She has always watched the ways how her mother entertained her men back then. Since she was young, she learned the art of seduction.

As Ye Shuxin entered the school grounds, she caught the attention of many.

Her chestnut brown hair swaying in sync with her movements, her heels clicking at every step. Everyone around her, even the school's gatekeeper gaped in awe at her exquisite beauty. Her eyes shone the color of a dazzling black, which traveled sharply from one person to another. It glistened every time she moved them. Her eyes seemed to shine in the sunlight, but hide in the darkness. Her lips were like a frozen rose, dangerously beautiful.

A gentle breeze kissed her face, blowing away some hair and revealing more of her smooth, pale as snow skin. It was a hot day and the heat gave her cheeks a light flush. Tiny beads of sweat that trickled down the side of her face made her sexier than she already was. With the sunlight and the wind seemingly working alongside her, she succeeded in stealing each and every person's attention with just a few paces on her way to class.

Ye Shuxin had a kind of understated beauty, perhaps it was because she was so disarmingly unaware of her beauty. A few changes in style and a pinch of confidence turned her into someone unstoppable.

Her classmates were all surprised at Ye Shuxin's sudden change in appearance, especially the girls who had bullied her.

While Ye Shuxin was sitting quietly on her seat, the girls who bullied her ended up approaching her.

"Oh my, Ye Shuxin? Is that you?" The leader, Nai Yuge, faked a gasp.

Ye Shuxin had always been timid, so even with her makeover, it would take more than one night for her to do the same to her personality.

"How much did you pay?" Nai Yuge smirked.

"Did you sleep with someone to finally have the money for plastic surgery?"

Ye Shuxin clenched her fists tightly since her mother's words rang in her mind. She has to fight back.

She has enough of their antics.

"Screw it." She whispered under her breath.

"Huh? Did you say something?"

Ye Shuxin raised her head to look at Nai Yuge and smiled, "Your slander doesn't bother me. A perfect and natural face like mine costs a fortune for you through plastic surgery. Do I look rich? Even if I am to sleep around, I don't think I will be able to get enough money within just two days… Do I look like a person with a healing superpower to be able to do plastic surgery within just two days? Please use your brains."

"You. you and you." Ye Shuxin pointed at some of the girls that were beside Nai Yuge. "It seems that you've taken your bonding as far as going in the same hospital together... your eyes, nose, and chin are masterpieces of one particular professional. How cute."

"Y-You bitch!" Mo Han, one of Nai Yuge's companions raised her hand and was about to slap her but her hand stopped in the midair upon hearing, "The teacher is coming!"

Nai Yuge glared at her, "We're not done. Meet us at the rooftop after class."

Before, Ye Shuxin was stupid enough to follow her simplest orders. This time, instead of meeting them, she went directly to the boys' soccer club.

Nai Yuge's boyfriend was a member of that club and she has already made up her mind in getting back at her by stealing her boyfriend.

Of course, at first, it wasn't easy. She had to know his schedule and think of a plan.

There was one thing she was sure about though. No matter what sort of man they are, married or not, in the end, they all love to fuck.

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4.8
1016 Chs

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4.7
428 Chs

After Having Everything Taken Away, She Returns As A God

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4.7
1245 Chs

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4.7
1628 Chs

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Rosegold_n · 都市
4.2
169 Chs

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(This is feedback on the first chapter uploaded) Hello, dear author. As I hope for your growth, please do not take this the wrong way. I found this chapter boring. The way it was written is weak. From the very beginning (the synopsis), it could've been better. I'll break it down the best I can for you. To be honest, the way it was written felt like a report than a story. It's like when you get homework from school to summarize a chapter in a novel, this is the summary. It didn't help much for the reader to imagine the story. Since you started the chapter by introducing the main protagonist, I think you could've explored on that more. Regarding the main lead you conjured, I find her too unrealistic. To make her seem more appealing, you could use more descriptive sentences to describe her beauty and personality. It just said she's a beauty and then the next sentence is about a totally different aspect about herself. While I read that, I was like "That's it?". It fell flat to me. Her background story is too common for a main lead, in my opinion. Her mother is a prostitute, she's a beauty, she was bullied and underestimated. Her resolve to never become like her mother and prove her enemies wrong is great, but then she decided to get a sugar daddy after one mention from a friend. If she was greedy since before, then I'd understand it better if she just dropped out of school to find a sugar daddy, but it says she graduated-- another thing to elaborate on. Also, I found the way this was written too fast paced. She went to a night club, saw Jin Mingze drunk and took advantage of him. It would've helped to introduce who this Jin Mingze was. While reading that part of this chapter, I would typically assume she just slept with a random drunk person who seemed wealthy. This whole scene could've been written more elegantly. It started from her wanting a sugar daddy to her being in a night club and then they have sex. Then it's "the next day". It was also mentioned "Don't they usually leave a check?"-- I think that highly contradicts her resolve to not become a prostitute like her mother. She was expecting to get paid for having slept with him. That's prostitution, girl. Next is the scene afterwards. She was going to use the excuse that she got pregnant after that one night stand. It would help to mention how long has passed since their last encounter. She was able to produce an sonogram right away. She conceived a child that quick, which is pretty bizarre. Just to comment on how she barged in the company, a high-end company like that wouldn't entertain her with just the reason of being the Chairman's girlfriend. At that situation, the receptionist would either pass it on to a manager or contact the person in reference to confirm before letting her in. Having the receptionist get intimidated by her spoiled ***** getup is unrealistic. If it's a wealthy company, seeing women dressed and exuding confidence as such would be normal for a receptionist who receives all forms of guests in a building. Plus, with that scene, mentioning she's wearing a beautiful red dressed that hugged her figure followed by her being a woman with limited money is contradicting. It would help to mention how or where she got the dress. Then she got to the top floor so easily. Normally, those floors are restricted and can only be accessed by a special key card to be scanned by the elevator. Then there's the secretary who's got a short fuse. A well-seasoned professional wouldn't lose to temper over a kid like the protagonist. Yes, she is a kid. It would be more convincing if she had gone through years of torment before resorting to getting a sugar daddy, but she just graduated and that's her goal already. Again, all these situations are just unrealistic. Several factors weren't taken into consideration and would do well for the story if it had. Finally, with that last scene with her meeting the chairman and denying money for marriage, to be honest, it is laughable. If they met at a night club and the chairman was drunk, it would be more plausible if he doesn't recognize her at first, then she would have to jog his memory. Perhaps that's where she can use the seduction skills she got from her mother. Then actual negotiations could begin. Honestly, it went all too quickly. The chairman just accepted it like snap. Everything went too easily for the main lead. Again, unrealistic. Aaaand, he has a daughter. With that, I can pretty much guess what will happen next. I do spot some good points, not to worry. The ***** and wealthy chairman of some unknown company is a common trope. I like that you made the main lead confident despite her naive age, albeit too good to be true. I also like that the chairman has a child. Another thing I like is the choice of names for the characters. Now for the grammar. I spotted so many. To name a few: "Because of her mother's work, she got impregnated with one of her customers and that's how our lovely female lead was born." "She got impregnated" strikes me as an odd way of saying it. It could be just "she got pregnant", no need to complicate it. Also, it was misleading. You started the sentence with "because of her mother's work", that led to the next part of the sentence to seem like it's about the main lead when it's still about her mother. It could be written as "Her mother worked as a prostitute and because of that, she got pregnant and that's how the protagonist was born." Something along those lines. Basically, "Her mother worked as a prostitute" and the next sentence could be merged together. In a lot of paragraphs, you kept mentioning the main lead's name that it's redundant. Try using pronouns when you're still talking about the same person. I've mentioned it before that the writing was weak. Reading more stories and how descriptive sentences are constructed would do you well. Everything was on point which made it seem fast paced. I'm not sure what else to say. Regarding the chapter title, I dunno if it's webnovel's fault, but it shows up on my end as "Chapter 1: Prologue: Sugar Daddy" The first chapter and the prologue should be different. Speaking of prologue, if you intended to write more eloquently in the coming chapters and had purposely written this chapter this way because it's a prologue, I'd understand better. I skimmed through your other work "Ten Years Later: The Bullied Husband" and I like the way it was written better than this. Sorry for the long comment, but know that I wish for your growth and improvement in writing. If you would allow me, I would be happy to give my opinion on your other and/or future works. :) Have a great day and stay safe not only during this pandemic but always! ^_^ (Regarding the rating, it's just the first chapter and can't really rate how stable the updates are and how the story is developed so I just chose the middle rating for most)

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Review written 18th of May 2020 Writing Quality Generally written well, although, there are a few grammical mistakes and/or syntax errors, however, this does not take away from the reading experience. Unlike translated works, which make itself apparent that it is translated, this work shows the effort the author to write in native English; and with much success. Stability of updates The chapter always seem to magically be updates on time and sometimes early. We as readers are told very clearly what to expect for updates and if any issues are there. I am personally very sad that that this novel isn't updated more often, however, the author must have that breathing room. There are also mass releases of chapter for us readers when the author has time to release them, which is an added bonus. Story development The story is a stark contrast from the author's other works (fairy tale inspired ones), but takes a similar approach to character development. For those that enjoy the light schemes, face slapping, and quick wits, this novel may be one that makes you happy. Character design Many of the characters that are introduced have a fulfilling story to them with plenty of details added to supplement the reader. However, the details are not all encompassing, which does leave some interpretation to the reader. A little reader imagination does make a difference. World background There is plenty of description and detail for the world that the characters are in. It allows the reader to enjoy the experiences of the setting and to be immersed in its marvel. Other notes There is roughly 3000 words per chapter, which is 6-8 coins when this book goes premium. For the author I have really enjoyed your other works and am looking forward to seeing this novel develop into a wonderful short read, like the other ones.

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