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A Time Traveller's Guide to Feudal Japan

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Do people chase greatness, or does greatness chase us? A.I. genius, Gengyo, through the assistance of SAPPHIRE attains the means to time travel. He seeks a simpler life, and wishes to experience the warmth of a family. But often we do not get what we want, we get what we deserve. And his peaceful times soon end, as war storms Japan, and in order to protect his peace, he must conquer. Join Gengyo as he walks a blood-stained path toward absolute domination, seizing control of Japan. //Brief extract from one of the battle scenes. Written from the point of view of a samurai landowner, Niwa Nakatane. The hooves grew closer to Nakatane's position and their beating hearts grew faster. Perhaps they could simply remain like that, hiding behind the tree, and allow these barbarians to pass? That way could they not return home to their families? Could they not give their dear wives one final kiss, or share one final story with their enthusiastic youth? Nakatane knew exactly what they were thinking. And as the ground rumbled, and the mounted beasts howled, he was the first man to step out from the trees and make his stand. "OORAH!" Possessed by a furious energy, he thrust out with all the aggression of a war god, puncturing Ochi's stallion through the chest with the sharpened wooden point of his lengthy spear. The mammoth fell from his mount clumsily, his head colliding with a nearby tree root. He ceased to move, and a pool of blood began to form around him. "ARM THESE SPEARS MEN! VICTORY SHALL BE OURS!" He stood in front of the charge of over 150 horsemen, alone. But he did not give a single inch of ground. He met the charge of the next man in line, roaring vengefully, possessed by all the rage and power that had accumulated in his body over these past years. The horsemen shrieked like a pack of hyenas, fanning out, each eager for a piece of the man who had brought down their leader. //I did not create the book cover. All credits go to the original creator.

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0 :Auxiliary Volume
1 :The inevitable war
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3 :The Vengeful Road
4 :The New Daimyo

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The quality of this novel is much better than most in Qidian, The writer's writing skill is pretty good, and he's very clear in what direction he wants to take his story forward. The writing is void of *******ism, which is rare to find in Qidian. The writer's command of english is very good. However, I felt his understanding of Japanese culture isn't sufficient enough. The biggest problem to the storytelling is the attempt to blend and use old Japanese, modern Japanese, and modern english words and terms to tell the story. Very frustrating for me to see other characters keep calling the mc Miura-kun, as if he's a high school boy in shounen novel. Also, his sister (Very shounen sister, she has all the traits) calling him nii-san and nii-chan instead of Aniue or Onii-sama/san (It actually should be Tadakata-Onii-sama/san, because she has another older brother, especially when all three of them are presented). These details are important, at least I deem them to be when the Author expects us to learn the archaic Japanese words for 'spearman' and 'archer'. If you want to be that authentic, you need to walk the whole nine yards, not using english pound for draw weight, and definitely not having these Japanese characters talk like modern people. This breaks the story for me, more than anything else. I'm very critical when I comment, especially when I recognize that the Author is competent. Mark twain once said "The difference between the right word and the almost right word is really a large matter – it is the difference between the lightning and the lightning bug.", and this sums up my feeling of this novel. I know that the story will get better, and it's actually top-tier when you compared to other webnovels, but please for the love of all things holy and good, be more careful with details. This later part of comment is just nitpicking: The mc is typical, in the way a genius mc in webnovel is. The achilles's heel of writing this type of mc is that he's expected to be very good with science, and anytime he isn't, that breaks the reading experience. The most glaring example is from Ch.1 when he tried to explain the time-traveling conundrum: Yes, sentience is weightless, but it has mass. The different between weight and mass is basic science. This is Ch.1, and I already doubt the mc intelligent, and my prejudice against him being a genius has formed. So his subsequent actions will be question every time they make no sense. It's one of the reasons I dread genius mc, and it turned me away from the story when I read this kind of sloppiness. You can't be a technological genius when the A.I. you created—after it evolved to its v.1000, self-claimed as the peak of technology, and even capable of time-traveling—still don't have a 'please confirm option'. To put it into perspective, even the Gameboy version of Pokemon has this option when you select your first Pokemon. That game is sold in 1995, when we still listen to our music through cassette tape, and I can say for certain though it has entertain a whole generation of mankind, it sure hasn't reach the peak of technology yet. Also, I don't think the Sengoku period is the time for peacefully raising your family, the only thought I've when reading this was, 'The mc and the A.I., they aren't that intelligent, aren't they?' This part is so contradicting to the mc character and his pet A.I., even truck-kun makes more sense.

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