A DEMON LOVE

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The novel is good, the thing I liked in this novel is as how the author fluently introduces the characteristics of the characters he introduces and the pacing is also quite good, but there is still room for improvement as first of all author should try to improve the grammatical mistakes he makes in the ch's and sometimes there is a lack of emotional impact from the characters and also this is for the Author --> You have made the paragraphs too long it actually makes confusion when they are together this much so as how I felt it would good if you make them of at least 3 lines and then space, then continue. That's all I wanted to say still you have made a good one

Very well written, the story has great character and plot development. I didn't notice much in grammatical or spelling errors. I love the romance in the story. All in all I highly recommend this series to all book lovers.

The novel has a lot of problems, the lack of dialogue highlighting, the plot immediately throws into the thick of events, without explaining anything about the world or the main character. The characters are not particularly worked out, they are not interesting to watch.

i crossed over with Immortal System . Go and read it i am sure you will like it

Your book has such a cute cover, and the plot is truly intriguing! I enjoyed how smoothly it flowed into the story. Your creativity and storytelling skills are commendable! Just a little attention to punctuations and paragraphing, and your writing will shine even brighter! Keep going, and keep writing with passion! Looking forward to more chapters and witnessing your talent grow.

Awesome work Author! Great plot with good writing. Up your updates a little and there you go, you'll be well off 🌚

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Hi there! I love your story, it has a lot of potential and could be better in terms of writing style. However, I would like to point out that your work is rather difficult to read because of the lack of "" when characters talk. You can improve your writing with the help of grammar-checking tools like Grammarly. Once you use such tools, I believe your writing will improve a lot!

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nice story I'm already seeing alot of potential male leads 😅😅but the problem I noticed is the conversation I wish they were like this "my name is" than this, my name isand there are little grammatical errors with little to no punctuation but you're trying

Everyone's already mentioned grammar, so I won't hammer on about how awfully ineligible it is. A few other things stood out to me. 1. Your chapters should be between 1200 to 1500 words on lower average if you ever want to land a contract. It's also what people are used to reading here. Yours are a bit too short. 2. There is too much dialogue for the amount of action you have going on, and it's too cluttered amidst descriptions and narration. 3. Chapter naming: you need to only use the actual name for your chapters, currently they read as Chapter 6: Chapter Six. 'Tis no good. I also recommended some tools that might help you with proofreading. Also, check out the writer's academy on inkstone. It has some very solid guides. Good luck, and don't give up.

This is a very captivating novel I love the story line and the character design. The author has done a great job with the story. I encourage everyone to read this.

It could use some copyediting, it's a little rough to track in spots but otherwise it's an incredibly solid story. Definitely going to follow-up with this one.

This Is an amazing story I love the author’s way of writing

I have never read a book as mind blowing and engaging as this. Every new chapter is a new and different and amazing adventure. I have to give it to you author, kudos.