Review Detail of NitrogenousBeing in Only I Can See The End

Review at about chapter 38: So I’m interested in the story, but the writing is killing my desire to continue. There are too many useless meaningless redundant cliché flowery and abstract phrases. Also don’t get me started on the stupid repeating blocks of useless thoughts when the MC panics. A good rule of thumb: any more than three identical repeats is too many. The MCs emotions often aren’t relatable. Plus, the author tends to jump to the reveal a little faster than he should, which I find relatable because he’s trying to fit 20 more reveals behind it. Anyway, the grammar is good and the story has a plan behind it, but please work on the prose. Make sure there’s a reason for flowery words or don’t use them. Keep your sentences simple and direct. Thanks.