Alright. I like the hook- It says something bad has happened. However, I find that the first chapter is just a preview. And honestly, I don't like previews/prologues. In my mind, they are mainly for exposition dumps. The grammar is easy to follow and I do like her coming to terms with being isekai'd. This could use a bit more descriptions from the MC's point of view. You could tell us what details catches her eye. This could help define her character as well.
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