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2021-08-09 07:23

I have read quite a bit, it has a good plot line but most of the time I am left confused by some of the wording choices in the story. I feel like the story has been a bit rush and not checked for grammar mistakes. A lot of sentences didn't make any sense but I still enjoy the book neither less.

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Thank you very much, I still need to work on my grammar. But I'll do it. Thanks for your insights. If you like it, please continue to read.

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