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king_sake
king_sakeAuthor4yr
2020-11-17 08:11

well I don't know how I'm going to do that's up to u guys pls give me any type of criticism I can take it but don't just insult me pls I just doin this for fun so pls don't flame me

lookism jimins story

king_sake
3.6
51 Chs

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Lake_Klan
Lake_KlanLv1

hmm you really need to work on grammar and thing like punctuation marks

3yr
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covestar
covestarLv14

Can u make an actual synopsis and can u add more tags? The tags state that the book is comedy and slice of life, but ch 2’s title is literally tragedy, sounds like something bad happens. Your synopsis and tag would give readers a feel of your book. Like is it a weak to strong vibe, is it with a neutral evil mc, or is he a villain? Is it a lone wolf character or a happy yo lucky duded with many friends. Add a synopsis highlighting the highlight of mc’s life or the intro to the story or both.

1yr
king_sake
king_sakeAuthor

I dropped all my story’s

covestar:Can u make an actual synopsis and can u add more tags? The tags state that the book is comedy and slice of life, but ch 2’s title is literally tragedy, sounds like something bad happens. Your synopsis and tag would give readers a feel of your book. Like is it a weak to strong vibe, is it with a neutral evil mc, or is he a villain? Is it a lone wolf character or a happy yo lucky duded with many friends. Add a synopsis highlighting the highlight of mc’s life or the intro to the story or both.
1yr
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Yu_Feng
Yu_FengLv1

this one of the only lookism fanfics on webonovel it's not the greatest of all time but it's update stability is great I hope he learns how to punctate correctly at some point tho

3yr

Saint_Lons
Saint_LonsLv1

I would say your getting better then from when I first started to read please don't drop plaeseeeeee I will support with power stones bro bro bro

3yr
Lake_Klan
Lake_KlanLv1

I think the author has a good idea but he just doesn't know how to put it down on the paper right if that makes sense well that's just my opinion

3yr
Dannt_
Dannt_Lv2

Hare una reseña sobre mi opinion sobre esto, aunque se subio hace 2 años. Calidad de escritura 1 estrella: ¿en serio hermano?, solo narras todo y simplemente las conversaciones las narras, se siente como un resumen Estabilidad de actualización 1 estrella, bueno su ultima actualizacion fue hace 2 años y que los capitulos sean de menos de 700 palabras da mucho que hablar Desarrollo de la historia 1 estrella: dice que no tiene tiempo para hacer capitulos mas largos, ¿ por que te apresuras a subir capitulo?, por que simplemente no subes 1 cap por semana lo suficientemente largo y que no sea por escribir nada mas, es aburrido leer un resumen asi. Puede ser mejor si simplemente escribiera algo mejor y las conversaciones no fuera tipo "yo dije esto" y ya, simplemente asco Diseño de personaje 1 estrella, no se sabe si es reencarnado o que. Simplemente es un personaje superficial y ademas con 10 años mide 170 cm lo cual es ilogico, entonces cuando termine de crecer (probablemente a los 20) medira 3 metros? Aunque el mundo es lookism, como que algrego cosas personales a su gusto, lo cual esta bien. Pero solo esta bien cuando almenos explica que paso Asi que si nisiquiera te esfuerzas ni escribas

1yr
Dead00
Dead00Lv4

I can’t tell the p.o.v for the characters at all and it’s so confusing

1yr
KING_ABBASI
KING_ABBASILv4

bro you just came back and now you disappeared again c'mon bro we don't have any lookism ff so plz don't drop this 🙏🙏

1yr
Miyuri_CY
Miyuri_CYLv1

keep it up [img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=exp][img=exp][img=fp][img=fp][img=fp]^_~◑﹏◐§(*￣▽￣*)§(ಥ _ ಥ)＞﹏＜ψ(｀∇´)ψO(∩_∩)OO(∩_∩)O(´▽`ʃ♡ƪ)(^_-)db(-_^)o(*￣▽￣*)ブo(*￣▽￣*)ブ

2yr
ToxicThot435_
ToxicThot435_Lv3

Well to tell the truth idk how to make A review but a this point hes only following the main character wich is getting annoying im not going to lie Writing quality 2 i would say you should edit your early chapters because if people see that they are going to start dropping it or putting bad reviews Updating stabilty 1 you took a break igs for a long time idk what happend soooo thats all Story development 1 idk much about this but at this point hes just with the mc and letting everything happened its not fun anymore , like STOP FOLLOWING HIM EVERY WHERE Character design 2 like i said dont know much but umm he feels like aaaaaaa!!!! Idk but its ok igs World backround 4 its Lookism and you put some stuff of your own so thats good igs

3yr
MrYamcha
MrYamchaLv4

Hello author please put paragraph spaces and instead of making multiple short chapters just make it into a 800 word one or something it is very draining reading long paragraphs no offense

3yr
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