Review Detail of MORAN94 in THE FANTASY LAND

the fantasy land had a good story line, You just have to improve the dialogue, punctuation and sentence separations in paragraphs, also don't include emojis in chapters, the rest, I like it. keep going and fighting!! [img=update][img=recommend][img=update][img=recommend][img=update][img=recommend][img=update][img=recommend][img=update][img=recommend][img=update][img=recommend][img=update][img=recommend][img=update][img=recommend][img=update][img=recommend][img=update][img=recommend]