Review Detail of HeartRend in Immortal beast Ascension

Author's subjective view: Writing quality: 5 stars. I think It's quality writing I have developed over years of study and practice. Gammer should be nearly perfect. Grammar Nazi's might find something if they are picky. Stability: 2 stars. Only two chapters, so I will see where the must takes me. But I know I am very busy with work, school and job-search so I won't be able to write every day, or even every few days. Mostly when I have time and the must strikes. I hope to create a story I enjoy writing so I actually want to come back and write, rather than find it a chore. Development and Design: 4 stars. This is what I hope to do. I want to take it a little slow in how I introduce things so I can flesh out characters, motives and sceneries. I want people to be able to visualize what they are reading rather than just get the point across. When reading myself, I always find the most enjoyment when a novel is immersive and I can picture what I am reading. I aspire to do that as well. Will take advice for improvement World Background 3.5 Stars. Not much done yet, but I hope to flesh it out. However, if I actually flesh it out a lot, I am going to get bored as I know the world I am envisioning is massive, so much so that I rather introduce the parts necessary rather than be too detailed at once. That will bore me, and you. In the end, I am a reader first and author second. But I hope to take criticism for improvement. Just don't bother me with grammatical errors because I believe there are very few and I am not going to bother fixing those for now.