Review Detail of Ivanicjpg in Versatile: Alternate World
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ok first off, I have read up to chp 116 the story it self is good the execution is not.. as I was reading I noticed a ton of inconsistent thing like when he kill the necromancer in his mansion he should be pretty high lv, definitely above lv 50 since in the past he bought tier 5 skills that can only be bought after lv 50. Now I'm reading that at the end of Chp 115 MC is lv 49 yea nah Like I have said in the beginning the story is good but the execution is not because of these inconsistencies. if you can turn off your brain and just enjoy the story anyways have fun, if not wait for a rewrite is it ever comes. I also have have some problems with the MC's personality and reasoning something in regards to his family and friends but whatever, as long as Author-san can fix the inconsistent content of this book with regards to lv and progression this book will be great
Versatile: Alternate World
Kyosei
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Yes, I agree with you. Some parts of the story needs a complete rewrite since some are just very confusing that even I got confused when I proofread it. I already noted the chapters that needed complete revision and those that only need a slight revision so rest assured I am already working on them.
Ivanicjpg:your story is great and deserves recognition But I honestly don't think you can save it without a full rewrite... I've kept reading after my review and still love the actual story, just ignoring some of the plot holes but still the first dozen chapters are like a separate story, same but slightly different and that just messes with the experience good luck Author, I will be waiting on the side to see when you do fix these things
your story is great and deserves recognition But I honestly don't think you can save it without a full rewrite... I've kept reading after my review and still love the actual story, just ignoring some of the plot holes but still the first dozen chapters are like a separate story, same but slightly different and that just messes with the experience good luck Author, I will be waiting on the side to see when you do fix these things
Kyosei:thank you for the review, yes I am aware of the inconsistencies and was already writing some of the chapter rewrites to at least get rid of what caused those plotholes. And thank you for enjoying the novel despite it's flaws, I appreciate it. Have a good day.
Kyosei:Yes, I agree with you. Some parts of the story needs a complete rewrite since some are just very confusing that even I got confused when I proofread it. I already noted the chapters that needed complete revision and those that only need a slight revision so rest assured I am already working on them.
Looks like either you never rewrote those chapters, or they are still wrong. The CP gain and level progression is all over the place. You say he kills dozens of monsters, but the XP and level don't add up. You say he is one level but many chapters later and after killing multiple bosses and numerous monsters he is still that same level. He gets skills from a specific class and 20 something chapters later say he hasn't gotten any skills from that chapter.
Kyosei:Yes, I agree with you. Some parts of the story needs a complete rewrite since some are just very confusing that even I got confused when I proofread it. I already noted the chapters that needed complete revision and those that only need a slight revision so rest assured I am already working on them.