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course. unless that was just a play on words or an actual curse is going to be leveled at Harry by a house elf...
huh, odd. for some reason, a voice belonging to a very punchable ponce just quietly mumbled the words "my father will hear of this" in the back of my mind. how weird.
There have been a few times like this where someone asks a question that was already answered. Kakashi literally just said "Hey look, it's Might Guy and his dad Might Duy." You don't need to have the Mc question if those two people training are Guy and Duy because, again, Kakashi literally just told the Mc that that was indeed them.
If I had only one piece of advice to give, it would be this: We, as readers, don't need immaculate descriptions of things like his dinner. In fact, I feel such complex descriptions for ordinary things only take away from your story. if it takes me 20ish seconds to read through what he had for dinner, that's 20ish seconds of me losing focus on the story. as someone who reads before sleeping, that 20 seconds is enough for someone sufficiently tired to fall asleep. Do with my opinion as you will author. I'm not trying to insult you or your writing as you write really well. Just try to focus your writing on things that actually matter to the story.
it's also completed on webnovel. Just search the title and go read it from someone who actually credits the original author and doesn't shamelessly change the title and calls it their own work.
Stolen work. Harry crow is the original title. it's completed on Fanfiction.net. author will delete this review because they are a coward and thief who does not credit the original author. you should be ashamed.
so... they told Ron and Harry anyway? after saying they would not tell them about it?
don't forget about the literal skeletons under his floors. so many skeletons...
For some reason, I hear the song "someday I'll get it" when reading this...
you may want to remove the section of this chapter that you repeated.
that have literal lake water on the other side.
or the flying wind sail from Treasure Planet. that thing was and is still the coolest flying tech I have ever seen.
was always a fan of flying longboards. Smaller than a surfboard, but longer than a skateboard. kind of like the new skimmers from D2, but more magic instead of tech. you could also have the Mc start developing magi-tech...or hex-tech(?) if you wanted to keep a more techy theme.
they are in the dungeons and under the lake, though... would they have windows?
in the trio, willpower typically comes from the mind, "A disciplined mind breeds a disciplined will, Yada Yada..." and emotions are described as coming from the spirit or soul...? something felt on a deeper level than just mind, or something. I'm just trying to get some clarification because I thought soul and spirit were interchangeable terms for the same thing. This is not meant to be a dig at the author in any way, I am just dumb.
so, in this case, is the spirit a different part of the soul, or vise-verse? I've heard of the mind-body-spirit trio before, but not soul and spirit, which I originally thought meant the same thing...
unspeakably horrendous? all-consumingly dreadful? immutably archaic? Does anyone have anything else to describe something that's indescribably bad? asking for a friend.
...do you mean to say that some chose reincarnation? Since I don't remember the Mc actually choose to reincarnate...
"super rare gold grade comprehension to all languages..." or something g like that back in chapter 2...
he got the ability to read, write, and speak in all languages already, right? so this is literally a waste of points...