I think emphasizing a motive would also do wonders for the cohesion of the story. The entire story up till this point has been extremely confusing to read, focusing more on emotions and dream sequences which are a little eh but I understand it. Having a super clear motive or something else that the character has be clear and emphasized would better ground the readers in an otherwise confusing and tough-to-read intro, which certainly turns off a lot of people.

Through his reincarnation sure, he’s been put at the top. But it’s obviously a position he’s been thrust into, in a world entirely foreign to him, people he doesn’t truly know. Needing to get stronger is one thing, but this is an extremely polar form of that with little to ease into this. It’s very obsessive and intense, which you could rationalize as being an effect of emotive magic. I don’t have the plot entirely figure out as much as you do, but maybe making it clear the reason he wants power is so he can find a way back to his old life and see his family would be enough to make it convincing that he would take these actions (if that makes sense in the context of the plot)

While I respect the ’rule of cool’ writing approach I just wish it was done better. Maybe I’m missing something but so far there’s just been 0 motive for him to torture himself like a brain dead ape every chapter it’s just cool and edgy so it happens

Morality is a fundamental part of social psychology. Though thinking about it now, Jett’s end progression may incorporates these aspects, it wouldn’t be absolute because he will always remain human, and as such will be subject to feelings which prevent such drastic changes. However I do see a future where Jett tackles the struggles of being at the pinnacle of power, I ultimately find the ‘immoral edgelord who chases power’ to often be done incorrectly and end up very shallow and edge for the sake of edge Immortality as a desirable concept has been ruined for me mostly because of how easily challenged it is from a philosophical standpoint. Ultimately, power and immortality are futile once you obtain it. Ultimate power is useless as it marks the absence of struggle, and life along with stories are series’s of struggles. While being a power fantasy, my story is quite grounded, trying to hold onto that gritty and real feel and tone. Not to say that immortality and no morals is out of the question, but it would definitely need to not only be earned through the culmination of the entire series but also properly built up to, which would all be determined by the natural progression of the story. I do see a universe where these ideas would be implemented however

Incredibly soulless diogue combined with a severe lack of motives and common sense just hurts man it hurts to read

Five year olds can’t grow muscle you moronic 5 year old

You need serious help

Brother you’re literally a toddler

Grammarly can help!

Comes out of left field

Because the setting is identical to every other fantasy story of similar tropes

Peak 8 star mage who decides to change a snobby kids diapers for her grand aspirations in life

Sure the physiqueless 12 year old with zero physical prowess is a gym rat calisthenics god among men

Seems a little silly to have him have full control over chaos for doing absolutely nothing. If chaos was kept as powerful yet caused extreme backlash to the user it would be an intriguing power to use, now it’s just gonna be go go gadget! win the fight with the power I didn’t earn !

So the progenitor intentionally misuses chaos to show its harmful effects then is like nah you can’t do that anyway haha. What was the point

Hey I’m the progenitor of chaos I know everything about the chaos element, but I’m not gonna tell you cause Nuh uh don’t feel like it

Why is mc called the progenitor of chaos when brother admits to his face that he’s the inheritor

Say fufu one more time and I’m gone ☠️

Whole family is a bunch of delusional troglodytes