Thanks for your thoughts. You’re right about the story being slow—it’s intentional to keep things realistic. Everything so far happened in just less than five days, and Kia’s only had the system for about two. It’d be weird if he suddenly had tons of powers when he’s still figuring out how it all works, especially since I want him to grow stronger over time. As for the world-building, I get where you’re coming from. It’s set in a world like ours, just with different names for places. I’ll work on making that clearer so readers can picture everything better. Appreciate the feedback!

Hey, thanks for sharing your thoughts! I get that the story’s pace might not be everyone’s thing. I’m trying to show how the character’s dealing with this new system and the whole zombie chaos bit by bit. I hear you on wanting more clarity on the system and the character’s development. I’ll keep that in mind as I keep writing. If you have any specific ideas on how I could make it clearer or more exciting, let me know! Appreciate you reading!

I get what you mean, and that’s valid. But my dad always washed my baby sister whenever my mom was busy. (I am saying baby cause she’s the last born and around the same age) that’s what I was thinking of when I wrote this scene and as for kia, they have an older brother and baby sister relationship throughout the story.

Error, I will correct it

Thank you for the gift🤯 and my first gift at that

But if there should be on, it would be single fl

Little or no romance, still debating