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It is a good story. I read it and I found myself fascinated by the wordplay that went on int he story. Strong characters are presented to us. The only thing I would say is a small little thing is some small grammar issues but it didn't detract from the plot. The comedy is also entertaining, very well done!

Oh I definitely like this wordplay.

This was a good read book. The character is powerful for their age but the premise is what's interesting and got me hooked in. There are some great characters among the cast of them and some funny moments. Overall, the author cooks up chapters nicely.

Well, this story is a fresh one so I can't really have too much opinion with only two chapters but I will say it is a good set-up, although as far as I can see not much has happened yet. Mc gets dragged into the world with the others of class and gain stats. The Mc may be a little too smart in my opinion. It does not come off believable to me. Sure, he aced science and all that as explained (Which could have probably been made into some dialogue to introduce some classmates beforehand even if just to get a brief understanding of their personality or even a hint. Just a suggestion!), but can he really just be transported, immediately figure out the world and then say it is the same? Also, if he is to learn about the system, it should be something he becomes able to understand rather than saying he 'knows' what he does not know. I believe that can be refined. Also building something before knowing anything seems....kind of strange to me. I understand that you want your MC to be a genius with a God complex but this not that credible. The concept and the story you write can be great, but you will have to make the right set-up and make it so that it can be more understandable in the character's motivation(if any) and goals. Currently, I cannot get a read of if this character yet and the plot has been introduced, only that he plans to deceive other people because he gained some unique skills. Sorry but this also had to be mentioned: I was introduced to alot of stats . It may be because i'm not stat heavy person but I found it to be unecessary (Unless of course these people are important roles to this story, but even then it should be slightly more condensed). I know nothing about the characters behind the stats at all. That's just my one issue there. The World itself has yet to grow since they were just transported and are in this room gaining the run-down of events. Not much has happened yet as mentioned. Now most of what I said can be alleviated with more chapters coming out in a stable rate but as it stands now, there is not alot that I know to say about the story right now. When more chapters do come out, my opinion may change but currently, more character is needed for me to understand the MC's behavior.

This is a story that I read and I believe that it has potential. The story, characters and world is good, and I will give it full marks, but there are a few grammatical errors you should go over. I really like the story premise though and the plot. great job.

I do believe that you can delete this comment. I'm not sure if it helps.

They became lions.

Thank you.